First go at translating a song...

[Ngawng]

Kaltxì aytute~

Na'vi is such a beautiful language and I've been looking for all sorts of random things to try my hand at translating.

And yeah I was wondering if you guys could help me rutxe~

Please try and make explanations as simple as possible; I'm a huge skxawng hehe


Bold = Na'vi
Italic = Attempted meaning

Plltxe nì-mawey rutxe
Please speak softly

Ayfol stayawm oengti txokefyaw
Or they will hear us

Sì ayfoti rayun pelun oengil ke lek
And they'll find out why we don't trust them

Plltxe nìtxur, 'eylan!
Speak up, dear

Talun ke stawm oel ngati
'Cos I cannot hear you

kin omìyum oe pelun ke lek oengil ngati
I need to know why we don't trust them

[Hawnuyu atxen]

Kaltxì!

I could find just some little infix-position mistakes:

in the first sentence you may add <iv> to plltxe, to make it more like a request
oengti should be oengit
and omìyum should be ìyomum

Other than that i think it's good.

[Ngawng]

Irayo, ma Hawnuyu!

I understand

Irayo for the help <3

[NeotrekkerZ]

I don't think you necessarily need the <iv> with plltxe as you explicitly say rutxe, either is probably fine though.

1.  In your 3rd sentence, sì should be ulte, as you are connecting two clauses, not two words.
2.  oengìl should be oengal.  The ng is actually part of nga, with the a suppressed.  When you add endings the a reappears and supercedes the ì.
3.  Same thing with oengit.
4.  pelun means why as a question, to use it as an adverb, probably lun-it a the reason that would work.
5.  Without knowing the context, it's hard to tell, but you might want to consider yawne beloved for "dear" in sentence 4.

[Ngawng]

Irayo, ma Neo.
That number four thing, I was looking for something like that for ages. Thanks <3

[Hawnuyu atxen]

Ma NeotrekkerZ!

2.  oengìl should be oengal.  The ng is actually part of nga, with the a suppressed.  When you add endings the a reappears and supercedes the ì.

I have to admit i never seen this before... could you tell me where can i find this (fe.: on the forum)?
Just because i thought that the "-ng" is "-ng" (though it certainly came from nga), but i really haven't seen that the "a" frrom it would reappear...

For the sì vs ulte... you're right it really should be ulte... (it was late back than...)
For the pelun-problem... same as the sìvs. ulte

For the 5th point you wrote, well i think it can be both... really depends just on the context...

[NeotrekkerZ]

I have to admit i never seen this before... could you tell me where can i find this (fe.: on the forum)?

I was surprised myself when I first heard about it.  You can find it in the Jan 21 Frommer email here.  If you're having trouble finding it, I've included it below: 

Jan 21

But the stress shift in oe would result in the consonant clusters ?/mw/ and ?/pxw/ in the pronouns.

    No new C-clusters! The phonotactics are [in]violable.

    In the dual and trial, the stress on the oe element does not shift. So pxoengaru has 4 syllables.

    In the 1st pers. dual inclusive, however, the problem doesn't arise, because there's no me- prefix. It's just "you (sg.) and me," i.e. naturally dual, so you don't need the marker. The forms are simply oeng (N.B.: no -a), oengal, oengat(i), etc.

As for 5th point, I do think it could be both also, just wanted to give the alternative, since I couldn't figure it out from context.

[Hawnuyu atxen]

Tewti... irayo, ma NeotrekkerZ...
I remember reading this, but seems like i didn't paid enough attention to it...