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Re: My poetry in German
« Reply #20 on: July 06, 2015, 02:07:52 pm »

Edit: Correction from PM.

Ahh, I overlooked this.  :-[  I don't speak germany (I used translator) but this looks nice  :) Nice words.

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #21 on: July 06, 2015, 02:16:47 pm »
It's OK. :) Thanks.
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #22 on: July 06, 2015, 02:22:21 pm »
It's OK. :) Thanks.


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Re: My poëtry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #23 on: July 14, 2015, 09:10:59 am »
My second attempt at nuking the German language.  :-[  :D

Wo die Poesie begegnet
Von Vawmataw

Ich will überall reisen,
Das Meer sehen,
Die Berge überwinden,
Gehen wohin die Poesie
Begegnet dem Leben.
Ich will die Galaxie
Und andre Welten besuchen,
Wo die heilige Poesie
Begegnet der Milchprärie.
Ich will liegen
Unter der Sonne
Und den Sternen,
Auf den poetischen Ländern.

Das Haus jedes Manns
Ist kein Fels
Sondern die Welt
Woher wir kommen.

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #24 on: July 14, 2015, 10:05:46 am »
Thou shalt open a thread with "My poëtry in Deutsch". ;D ;D ;D
/nah, joke :P

One does not simply nuke the German language. :P
My second attempt at nuking the German language.  :-[  :D

Wo die Poesie begegnet
Von Vawmataw

Ich will überall reisen,
Das Meer sehen,
Die Berge überwinden,
Gehen wohin die Poesie
Begegnet dem Leben. // suggestion: Dem Leben begegnet
Ich will die Galaxie
Und andere Welten besuchen,
Wo die heilige Poesie
Begegnet die Milchprärie. // suggestion: die Milchprärie begegnet
Ich will liegen
Unter der Sonne
Und den Sternen,
Auf den poetischemn Ländern.

Das Haus jedes Mannes
Ist kein Fels
Sondern die Welt
Woher wir kommen.

Other version coming soon....



I translated the poem Zìsìkrr asom from the Fanfic board. The English version already edited, but I didn't put it here.

Warme Tage

Tage werden waärmenr.
Wir verbringen diesen Tage
Zusammen mit den Sternen.

Disclaimer: I am not a poem writer... :P

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #25 on: July 14, 2015, 10:17:03 am »
yay! I didn't destroy the language. :D

Thanks for the correction :D

Wo die Poesie begegnet:
According to the Wiktionary, andre and Manns are possible alternatives. If these alternatives don't exist, I will add the missing e.

As for your two suggestions, I take them into account. However, it simply destroys the rhyme, since the two concerned verses are too far from each other. Also, I learned at school that the inversion is a figure of speech. Therefore, unless these two inversions are impossible or weird, even in poetry, I will keep them.

The word Milchprärie is an invention of mine. I needed a rhyme and Milch was problematic, so I made a nice compound word. Long live Deutsch! :D

Warme Tage:
 Oopsie  :-[
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #26 on: July 15, 2015, 09:47:46 pm »
The lone voyager

The lone voyager, it does deviate.
It deviates nowhere, to nowhere.
It went too far, won't communicate.
'Tis so bad, nobody is there.

It will voyage forever and a day,
Fly near places you'll never visit,
Worm between the stars its way,
And this is marvellous a bit.
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Re: My poëtry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #27 on: July 18, 2015, 04:33:28 am »

Ich will die Galaxie
Und andre Welten besuchen,
Wo die heilige Poesie
Begegnet die Milchprärie.
Ich will liegen
Unter der Sonne
Und den Sternen,
Auf den poetischen Ländern.


„begegnen“ requires the dative case in German. „jemandem begegnen“, to meet someone (by chance). So this would be

„Wo die heilige Poesie der Milchprärie begegnet.“ in a normal sentence, and

„Wo die heilige Poesie
begegnet der Milchprärie“

in your poetic style ;)

Very impressive, I have to say, ma Vawmataw! :D
Acquiring another language is hard enough, writing poetry in it even harder! Kudos!
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #28 on: July 18, 2015, 09:19:27 am »
Danke :)
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #29 on: July 18, 2015, 12:25:21 pm »
Pluto

Plains, mountains and troughs of mystery
A heart surrounded by five compadres
From its distance and solitude frosty
It's a phenomenal planet that I address
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #30 on: July 18, 2015, 12:46:03 pm »
Pluto

Plains, mountains and troughs of mystery
A heart surrounded by five compadres
From its distance and solitude frosty
It's a phenomenal planet that I address

 :D VERY NICE !!!  :D
And for this is now right time  :)

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #31 on: July 18, 2015, 02:17:47 pm »
Irayo :D
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #32 on: July 19, 2015, 06:46:28 pm »
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Pluto

Plains, mountains and troughs of mystery
A heart surrounded by five compadres
From its distance and solitude frosty
It's a phenomenal planet that I address
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I love it, it's an amazing poem. well done!
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch)
« Reply #33 on: July 26, 2015, 11:05:14 am »
Quiet

On the fabric or the grass plains,
When the last voice passes out,
It's as if the Milky Way went out
And made you forget your pains.
It's as if the time arrests for you
So that you can relish this moment.

One of the seldom instants God gives you
To reflect peacefully and to comment.
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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch et en français)
« Reply #34 on: November 25, 2015, 06:05:03 pm »
This one is in French only.
I'll add the ''translation'' so that you understand.

Pas à pas

Conquérissons les sentiers,
Les sentiers, puis les montagnes,
Puis les étoiles des montagnes !
Pas à pas, j'explorerai
Le possible et l'impossible
Mieux que les explorateurs infaillibles.
Conquérissons les journées!
Pas à pas, je réussirai.
Conditionnel ou inconditionnel,
L'amour, je n'attendrai.
L'armée de l'homme seul, éternelle,
Je la convoquerai.

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch et en français)
« Reply #35 on: December 05, 2015, 07:27:27 pm »
You don't know me

You don't know me.
Not all of me.
Inside my dreaming head
Sings happiness my body.
All of this wants to spread
Because my music is dreamy
Like a happy chore and guitar.

My head expresses teal.
This is happiness real:
Now.
So reach for it.


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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch et en français)
« Reply #36 on: December 05, 2015, 07:43:30 pm »
Wow :) This is very nice poem  :D

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch et en français)
« Reply #37 on: December 05, 2015, 07:46:28 pm »
Wow :) This is very nice poem  :D
Thank you! :D

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch et en français)
« Reply #38 on: December 05, 2015, 07:47:44 pm »
Wow :) This is very nice poem  :D
Thank you! :D

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I saw this now  :) Nice  :)

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Re: My poetry in English (und Deutsch et en français)
« Reply #39 on: December 07, 2015, 07:35:57 pm »
Nord

Il y a des merveilles dehors,
Comme, par exemple, le Nord.
C'est un autre monde.
Les arbres n'existent pas
Et enneigés sont nos pas.
Seuls les éléments grondent
Quand vous n'êtes pas là.


Dans ce monde les couleurs dansent
La nuit depuis l'anse,
Là où vos tristesses se noient.
Descendants des braves, quelques gens,
Pourvus de gentillesse,

Vous raconteront la nuit des temps.
Le bémol est la climatique froidesse,
Mais avec prudence, vous aimerez.
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