After the RDA - comments

[Muzer]

I can't believe how you can write so quickly but with such good quality! You just lead us into a nice serene side-plot that quite obviously isn't going to go anywhere, before throwing in a huge main plot event at the last minute! It makes it all very exciting, in my opinion, as you never know when something important will happen next.

If I'm brutally honest, I prefer this by far to your last story - I think because I can get into it more easily as you release so fast, but also maybe because it's all entirely new to me. I think I may have been getting a little bit tired of basically reading the script again but in a different perspective - this one is incredibly refreshing, new and exciting. It's all hard to tell, though - and of course I liked the last one a lot, as I said - I just seem to find this one even better.

[Puvomun]

Thank you, ma Muzer, for this big compliment. I'm a writing fool... (skxawng apamrelsi?)

[Puvomun]

I was asked for a PDF of the story so far.

You can find it, in ZIP format, here. The PDF contains the first 30 chapters. Note that the formatting is not up to standards as this is a quick and dirty dump.

Irayo for your understanding! Now I shall post the next chapter.

[Puvomun]

"Wait up. Did Norm just crack a joke?"

Puvomun had heard nothing crack so he said he did not know.

[Muzer]

Damn you and your cliffhangers!

[Puvomun]

Damn you and your cliffhangers!

[Nusumea Tirea]

I don't think he's that bad ;-)

[Amaya]

Wheeee!  I got to fly!

Also, eeps, stuff is goin' down

[Puvomun]

Wheeee!  I got to fly!

Also, eeps, stuff is goin' down

Yes... things are happening now.

[Puvomun]

Chapter 39 is about to see the 'light'. I think it is fair to state upfront that the end of this chapter is dedicated to someone here.

[Nusumea Tirea]

Chapter 39 is about to see the 'light'. I think it is fair to state upfront that the end of this chapter is dedicated to someone here.

It seems so, yes  I like how you collect your fans

[Muzer]

ROFL... I knew it would only be a matter of time before you put me in

It's rather handy because, although my name isn't a Na'vi name, it's legal phonetically (albeit pronounced differently).

[Puvomun]

ROFL... I knew it would only be a matter of time before you put me in

I am glad you like it

[Puvomun]

Yes, speed has dropped. I know, and I am sorry. Real life is interfering.
Chapter 40 is up now. I hope you are hanging comfortably, Muzer.

[Muzer]

* Muzer lets out an excited squeal

[Muzer]

[Puvomun]

Well, that is the story, ma eylan. Chapter 44 is slightly changed, and the last part, short, is now available.
I hope you got some pleasure from it. I certainly did. :-)

[Muzer]

Yay! Karma given!

I'm glad it didn't end up being like a Radio 4 drama (there are lots of Dramas on Radio 4 in this country that have a massive build-up, then finish the story in a ridiculously simple and easy way that makes the whole story, as good as it may have been up to the point of the climax, seem really dull, stupid and pointless). I feared it might have been as you were writing it, but you managed to finish it quite nicely and interestingly.

So, in conclusion, I'm very impressed by it!

(Sorry that this review isn't more coherent - if I could write coherently, I'd probably be writing a fanfic rather than just reading )

[Puvomun]

So, in conclusion, I'm very impressed by it!

Irayo, ma Muzer,

I am very glad that you liked the story. I actually worried about the 'radio 4 drama' ending, I'm glad I managed to avoid that.

The end is quite wide open. There might actually come more from it. Not sure yet.

[Puvomun]

Now how did that happen...

I am suddenly seeing the beginning of a new story, there are 460 words of it already on my screen. It looks as if Pandora has infiltrated my eltu lefngap.

Spoiler

"This is not a good idea," Norm said as he looked up the tree.

"Why isn't it?" Neytiri asked him. "It is a good tree, and it is close to Kelutral."

"This is a very big tree," Norm pointed out the obvious.

"Srane. You cannot live in a small tree with so many people," Neytiri tried to keep her patience with the man.

Jake agreed with Neytiri. "She has a point there, Norm."