An interesting life - comments

[Tsamsiyu92]

Story: http://forum.learnnavi.org/fiction-fanfiction/an-interesting-life-story-thread/

Comments go here.

Oe sìlpey tsni fìvur prrte' lu ngaru

[Unil stä'nìyu]

Plz keep it coming. This should be very interresting to say the least

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

interesting. i would like to see how this plays out. keep going.

[Tsamsiyu92]

  I am surpriced, because those comments weren't...welll.....expected. But Zero hasn't been here yet, because if he hates Dreamwalkers Dilemma, he will definetly hate my writing, which is far worse in my opinion.

I am doing this in secrecy... Chapter 2 wll come tomorrow, because I've got some nice 1-1,5 hour to do it.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

why are you comparing my work with yours? yours is a bit better then mine...i think.

[Muzer]

Looks interesting to me so far. Reminds me of one of the other fanfics as far as plot goes so far, but it's probably a coincidence (what's it called - that one by Tawtewng before his current one) - I've read quite a few fanfictions on this site and there's a limit to the number of ways you CAN start one of these off.

[Tsamsiyu92]

Looks interesting to me so far. Reminds me of one of the other fanfics as far as plot goes so far, but it's probably a coincidence (what's it called - that one by Tawtewng before his current one) - I've read quite a few fanfictions on this site and there's a limit to the number of ways you CAN start one of these off.

Yeah agree, all the good ideas are taken, so why not start my own with not a child of two species, but Na'vi only. And leave him completely without knowlegde. Chapter 2 has in fact formed itself within my head now, so expect it by 13:00 (GMT+1) tomorrow.

[Tsamsiyu92]

why are you comparing my work with yours? yours is a bit better then mine...i think.

I thought mine was worse than yours technically, and since ZERO hated on yours, i kinda expect the same reaction.

[Niwantaw]

why are you comparing my work with yours? yours is a bit better then mine...i think.

I thought mine was worse than yours technically, and since ZERO hated on yours, i kinda expect the same reaction.

zero hates the style of writing..
and the useless censoring (who uses @$$? really)

but this is not about duma's story this is about yours and
I can haz more?
(And i don't care if you nabbed ideas from mine... looking back mine was a bit rushed i think... people can use the rough idea if they want..)

[Tsamsiyu92]

^I did some modifications on the idea, you see, one species, not two.

I am sorry, but I wont be finished before 1300 (GMT+1)... I got to give back the school PC i have borrowed and can't write untill I come home. Then i have 1500-1900 alone-time to write maybe 2 (or possibly 3)chapters.

Eywa ayngahu, ma ayeylan!

EDIT: Irayo, ma history karyu ended the lesson an hour too early today, chapter comming up shorty:)

EDIT2: Chapter 2 up

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

want 3 wonder how he will react to pandora

[Tsamsiyu92]

want 3 wonder how he will react to pandora

Wait no more. Posting it right now.

edit: It's posted, I hope you'll like it. I promise to write longer chapters from now on. *starts writing number 4...*

Remember, I have always sucked at making up names in stories.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

4 would be nice, as well as longer chapters...unless you intend on doing a s***load of shorts

[Tsamsiyu92]

4 would be nice, as well as longer chapters...unless you intend on doing a s***load of shorts

The 4th one will be longer, i promise. I am writing it right now. There's no more homework, even though school ends next week.

Damn, you guys are a bit demanding, even though I enjoy writing these chapters, I will stop for today after 4 (i think, or maybe...)

EDIT: Chapter 4 finished

EDIT2: Chapter 5 is up...now i am seriously stopping for today.

Could take a while now for the next chapter, at home where I am in weekends, I have a problem with brothers suddenly boosting into my room. I shall try at least.

If you don't understand the Na'vi part, then you know how Jay (main character) feels.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

i know how addicting it is to write this stuff. i couldnt stop till CH. 10 the first time I started, and if you read it you realize how damn long my CH. are.

[Tsamsiyu92]

i know how addicting it is to write this stuff. i couldnt stop till CH. 10 the first time I started, and if you read it you realize how damn long my CH. are.

I have, can't wait for your newer chapters. But remember to stop the "@$$" and the censuring.

[Muzer]

Yours are good lengths - when I just have 5 minutes, they make for good, fast reading in comparison to those of some other people, which, while also very good, I often have more difficulty finding time for and so I can't read as soon as I'd like.

I'm interested in where you're going to take this story. I can't really comment on the storyline yet as I haven't seen enough. Grammatically it's pretty good, though I notice a few slip-ups in your English occasionally; on the whole, though, it's very easy to read (I don't mean to say that it's simple, just that you can read it without having to strain your brain), and the grammar only once or twice distracted me from the flow. I'm never good at commenting on character development so I'll miss that part out, other than to say that all the characters so far seem reasonably natural and real, unlike in a few other fanfics I've read (naming no names). Keep up the good work!

[Niwantaw]

other than to say that all the characters so far seem reasonably natural and real, unlike in a few other fanfics I've read (naming no names).

Mine?

[Muzer]

No, yours was good. Though it's already fading to the back of my mind (the old one, child of two species) - I'll try to find time to re-read it.

[Tsamsiyu92]

If you could tell me what gramatical problems i have, i could maybe fix them.