Comments: Pandoria's walk a soldiers story

Started by Txuraeyktan, April 18, 2010, 07:29:38 AM

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Txuraeyktan

Post your comments on my story here.
looking for the actual story go here-
http://forum.learnnavi.org/fiction-fanfiction/pandorian-walk-a-soldiers-story/msg185295/#msg185295
These guys are in the ER Click to save them!

Txantslusam Skxawng

My comment: You need to correct your spelling

Warning: real comment, this comment can may be offending
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Muzer

Other than the grammar (which unfortunately makes it quite difficult to read at times), this seems like it could be pretty good.



And I can't believe you killed off the tweety bird - he was my favourite character!
[21:42:56] <@Muzer> Apple products used to be good, if expensive
[21:42:59] <@Muzer> now they are just expensive

Txuraeyktan

#3
rahahaha! sorry about grammer i was doing via my cell phone so it was kinda hard but ill fix asap
but spelling IS 4 SHORT PEOPLE and that was not offending at all. but as you both probably guessed where the story is going...
i got a basic idea.
EDIT: Grammer fixed in chapter 1
These guys are in the ER Click to save them!