Dreamwalker's dilema {comments}

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

CH. 8 is now up for grabs, but it is also 2 parts because of its length. i didn't know they counted spaces as characters...

[ShadowMainZERO]

CH. 8 is now up for grabs, but it is also 2 parts because of its length. i didn't know they counted spaces as characters...

They do and they don't. You can have Word count only the letters if you want. I usually do. Besides, why are you using letter count? Just do a word count and if you break 3000 then split it. Unless you were doing an actual which you aren't.

EDIT: I checked it our and put it in Word. You made the right choice to split it. Although I would have made part 1 end in a cliffhanger and post part 2 next week but that is just me.

[Unil stä'nìyu]

First : What a nice story. And i really hope you'll keep on going, even if it's gonna be a 10 ton printout, resting on my bookshelf. LOL

I like your story, (in general) and the grammer may be wrong, but i get the overall meaning of the sentences. Isn't that the whole point in writing? To TELL something?

I will not sit here, whacking on your grammer, spelling etc. as i may be as bad as anyone at those things. (i'm not US/UK'ish by any means, so how would i know?) LOL

But. There is always a but.
The story, as i already said, is good IMO. But certian twists seems to be directly pulled from the movie itself. Not that this is bad, just made me wonder if it was a rewrite of the movie script. But then again, you twist it back and do something we (the readers) didn't expect.

Also. When you switch characters (to Ash's father) it took me quite a while to figure that it wasn't Ash who told the story. But that's stated somewhere before and i don't want to step anymore in it.

I would like to do some stories myslef. I just want to be able to do some Na'vi sentences first. (why i'm here in the first place) So until then, i'll be sure to keep an eye open for the next chapter from You.

And... Remember to have fun while doing this. I made a story back when i was playing WoW, about my first hunter in that world. And i ended after chapter 3 because it started to feel like "WORK" instead of "Spare-time-relaxation-thing"... Tends to happend, when i make the error of promising a chapter/week or so... Can't keep it up if i HAVE to... But that just me i think.

Anyway. Like your work, and can't wait to learn more of Ash's "new" life

Keep it flowing

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

thank you for the comment. CH. 9 should be up sometime this weekend and, if i dont get time, maybe this mon. since the holiday.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

boy this one was quick! and short too, which i didn't want. but hay, who cares? is up for reading. Enjoy.

[Kätsyín te Zotxekay Tsyal’itan]

Cool, me thinks I'll get reading.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

glad you like it.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

ok just a heads up: CH. 10 wont be up this week. i know i know, it shouldn't take this long but i haven't gotten the chance to work on it all week. plus, to add to the problems on my list, ive ween throwing up since midnight today and havent stopped since. you cant really work on something when your spewing chunks every 10 min. i feel like cr*p. (you can laugh at this Zelenal i dont care)

it will get up next week, i promise.

[rslayer9 (Eyktan TxurŽitan)]

Very descriptive.......lol i hope you get better

[Tsamsiyu92]

I disagree with all the bashing it is getting, it's awesome. Can't wait for the next chapter.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

thank you and it will get up

[Tsamsiyu92]

thank you and it will get up

Keep it up. I like all of the stories here, yours is one of my favorites:)

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

CH. 10 is up for reading. hope you all like it.

[Muzer]

It's definitely improving over a few of your earlier chapters, especially your writing style.

[Tsamsiyu92]

Nice chapter, can't wait for the next one.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

It's definitely improving over a few of your earlier chapters, especially your writing style.

thank you i try to think like Stephenie Meyer (twilight saga, The Host)

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

CH 11 is now up for reading. Hope it is enjoyible

[Tsamsiyu92]

^It certainly is. Keep it up

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Mistyping. wile=while, strait=straight.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

are you correcting me or yourself. Cause i will go get a boomstick to teach you some manners.... Just kidding

[Tsamsiyu92]

are you correcting me or yourself. Cause i will go get a boomstick to teach you some manners.... Just kidding

Sorry, i was correcting your story. You repeatingly write wile and strait instead of while and straight.