Friends 50th B-Day. Need help with a Na'vi poem.

Started by 'Itan Atxur, March 25, 2011, 09:45:50 PM

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'Itan Atxur

So a close family friend recently turned 50 and asked all who attended the party to make a bookmark that whenever she used it, it would remind her of the person who gave it to her. Since I'm the person who dragged her out to see Avatar after much protest (which is now her favorite movie of all time ;D) I'm doing an Avatar themed bookmark.

Making the background is easy. I already have a few backgrounds chosen which I think represent our friendship best. The problem I'm having is in creating a short poem. I'm bad enough at making a poem in plain English, let alone Na'vi.

So this is my request: I'm looking for a short poem in as grammatically correct as possible Na'vi that truly grasps the meaning of the phrase "I see you"!

Karma for ANYONE who takes a shot.

Thanks in advance!


;D ;D

-Itan Atxur

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Alyara Arati

This is just off the top of my head, so feel free to edit out any (or all) of this, and please add mood infixes wherever it seems good to you.  Here is my attempt at channeling Hallmark nìNa'vi:

Nga ke lu yawne oeru nì'aw
Fpi ayu asìltsan txe'lanmì ngeyä
Nga lu yawne oeru taluna
Krr a oel nìn menaritmì ngeyä
   Fra'uri lu nga, smon oe
Kawtu alahe teya si tsivun
Tsenge oeyä txe'lanmì a pum ngeyä
Frakrr nga lolu oeyä 'eylan
Na frakrr oe lasyu pum ngeyä
   Oel ngati kameie
Learn how to see.  Realize that everything connects to everything else.
~ Leonardo da Vinci

'Itan Atxur

Irayo ma tsmuke! Your help is greatly appreciated! Don't suppose I could ask you to translate that into English too?

Thanks again. Karma cookie well earned.


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Alyara Arati

It sounds a bit sappier in English, but:

I do not love you only
for the good things in your heart
I love you because
when I look into your eyes
     I know everything you are
no one else could fill
the place in my heart that is yours
you have always been my friend
as I will always be yours
     I See you
Learn how to see.  Realize that everything connects to everything else.
~ Leonardo da Vinci

'Itan Atxur

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That's actually pretty much exactly what I was looking for. I know her well enough that she'll see right through the sappiness and see only the true meaning. Thus the reason I was shooting for an "I see you" poem. I'm just gonna shoot this by one of the "grammar nazi's" on the forum, for I am most certainly not one of them, lol.

Thanks again! The bar is set pretty high now.

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Alyara Arati

Tstunwi ma 'Itan Atxur, and I hope your friend has a lovely 50th year! :)
Learn how to see.  Realize that everything connects to everything else.
~ Leonardo da Vinci

'Itan Atxur

I still haven't had the opportunity to give them their gift :(

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Tirea Aean

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Quote from: 'Itan Atxur on July 02, 2011, 12:23:53 PM
I still haven't had the opportunity to give them their gift :(

pfew. I was gonna ask if it was too late to suggest edits...:


Nga ke lu yawne oeru nì'aw
Fpi sìltsana ayu a txe'lanmì ngeyä
Nga lu yawne oeru taluna
Krr a oel nìn menarit ngeyä
   Fra'u a lu nga, smon oer
Kawtu alahe ke tsun teya sivi
oeyä txe'lanmì a tsengur a lu ngeyä
Frakrr nga larmu oeyä 'eylan
Na frakrr oe lasyu pum ngeyä
   Oel ngati kameie


;)

'Itan Atxur

Irayo ma tsmukan. I'm gonna have to reprint, but it'll be worth it. :)

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