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Machine comments.
« on: November 30, 2013, 05:01:01 am »
OK, so the first three parts are about William Candy along with a T800 development prototype. As a hybrid of different generations of prototype, you might call it a mule, and he carries a package from Britain to the US for someone else, so maybe mule is appropriate.
Now this is not just the adventures of a retired Chief Master Sergent Candy, that would be a bit dull, and not very Learn Na'vi.

So here's one about Jake .....
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #1 on: December 07, 2013, 04:44:28 am »
Plot twist ahead, prepare for complications!
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #2 on: December 14, 2013, 02:24:22 am »
Hiccup and Astrid do good cop/bad cop, well maybe violent Viking/nonviolent Viking.
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #3 on: December 21, 2013, 02:23:44 am »
Jake's talking to himself, maybe it's the pressure.
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #4 on: December 29, 2013, 06:13:24 pm »
OK, so here's another, a little later than intended, a little shorter than intended too.

Read this scene, then take another look at the 'MACHINE' logo, either at the top of the fic' page, or here .....
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #5 on: January 04, 2014, 04:29:15 am »
Another, again not so very long, enjoy!
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« Reply #6 on: January 11, 2014, 03:57:31 am »
Now Astrid's talking to herself, must be contagious.
A slightly longer piece this time.
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« Reply #7 on: January 25, 2014, 03:35:23 am »
Another piece, this one kinda follows on from the last piece.
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #8 on: February 01, 2014, 04:41:41 am »
Section 13, George and the Dragon.
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« Reply #9 on: February 08, 2014, 12:39:36 pm »
Section 14, who'd be a prison guard?
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #10 on: February 08, 2014, 01:01:25 pm »
Mini mistake at the spoiler description: Sectiopn 14 ;)

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« Reply #11 on: February 08, 2014, 04:40:10 pm »
Fixed, I actually spotted it almost immediately, I planned to fix it immediately, but my connection went all wobbly.

It's been doing last few days, I wonder what's up.

Did you spot any of the deliberate errors in the corpus?
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #12 on: February 08, 2014, 05:03:55 pm »
I didn't obseved one yet. I must read it more than one times to "see" an error.

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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #13 on: February 08, 2014, 06:32:24 pm »
Did you work out the Machine logo?
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #14 on: February 08, 2014, 06:33:41 pm »
No, I thought you did it?

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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #15 on: February 08, 2014, 06:51:36 pm »
I made it, but it's two pictures.
See, on the one hand it's just a metal plate with the word 'MACHINE' written on it, but on the other hand it has screws missing.
That, and after section section 8 I said .....



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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #16 on: February 15, 2014, 12:05:01 pm »
Section 15, now up.
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #17 on: February 22, 2014, 03:12:12 am »
And then there was another, section 16 now up.
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #18 on: March 01, 2014, 04:10:50 am »
Section 17, now up.
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Re: Machine comments.
« Reply #19 on: March 08, 2014, 10:29:24 am »
And now a section 18.
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