na'vi in the jungle comments thread

[‘Eylan hufweyä]

I am really impressed by your cool story.

The thing that I like most is the innovative idea of "domesticated" na'vi with a human name like "David", working for the men which seem to have come from earth and to have turned the forest of Pandora into a grey and uncomfortable big city. That's a completely new point of view and somehow refreshing, although it is sad. while I was reading, I could not stop imaginating a Na'vi in trousers and a jacket or a vest walking down a loud street downtown and who lives in a small flat with a television and a microwave... how strange. An entirely felicitous story. I will stay in touch with this, hopefully you are continuing writing.

that truly made my day ^^

[Dani]

I really like the story. It's something old told in a new way, wonderful!
I hope to read more soon.^^

[Maweyatan]

I like Snuffy.

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I like him because I am "Nantangä Tsmukan"

[Niwantaw]

I'll get the next one done.... eventually..
and i'm glad you like it

[Muzer]

My guess:

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Snuffy is going to die, almost die, and/or save the main character's life at the last minute (like Neytiri did)

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

did you get the idea of snuffy from my book-fan fic? i dont mind i just want to know.

[Niwantaw]

i haven't even read past chapter 3 so no.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

wow really? its at 8 whats taking you so long?

[Niwantaw]

don't like it.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

it gets better...or are you sad that i put Ash in a coma?

[Niwantaw]

no i did not like your style of writing nor the characters.
if you wish to discuss this further then PM me.

And snuffy if you really have to know is based loosely on what my cat would be like if he was a viperwolf

[ShadowMainZERO]

it gets better...or are you sad that i put Ash in a coma?

You DO realize that your story isn't the best in the world, right? Do we have to have this conversation again? You aren't a god among fanfic writers. In my opinion, you aren't even that good. I have read many, many fanfics that are way better then yours. You have an ego the size of a galaxy but have done nothing to even slightly justify it.

On topic: I haven't read it yet but I will eventually.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

jeez i cant mention it without getting noob comboed? and i do not have a ego the size of the galaxy. and thats only your opinion.

[ShadowMainZERO]

jeez i cant mention it without getting noob comboed? and i do not have a ego the size of the galaxy. and thats only your opinion.

Yes you do. You build up your story like it's the best thing since sliced bread. Like there is nothing wrong with it and everyone HAS to love it.

In reality there are a lot of things wrong with it. You know what they are because I have told you.

Yes that is only my (and more then likely Tawtute Akawng's) opinion but you haven't gotten a lot of feedback from this site and it is only on this site. I'm sure if you showed it to the right people then you would get similar reactions.

[Tsamsiyu92]

Duma Vadamee, don't brag too much about your story, if someone don't like it, then don't force them. Maybe you should read some fanfics that are considered good by most people to find out how you can improve your writing.

ShadowMainZERO, don't be too hard on him, let him write. Point him in the right direction instead of killing his motivation.

[Tsamsiyu92]

Great story, can't wait for the next chapter.

Little spelling mistake:

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Typo in the last chapter.

"Calm down boy, I'm happy to see you to"

[ShadowMainZERO]

ShadowMainZERO, don't be too hard on him, let him write. Point him in the right direction instead of killing his motivation.

Hey, in my opinion some motivation needs to be killed. Some people just aren't meant to do some things. You want good stories? You got em:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3199508/1/A_world_of_your_own

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5556199/1/Knight_of_a_Whim

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4918896/1/Cry_A_River

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4889635/1/Where_do_you_think

Anything by this author really.

There are several more but I don't feel like looking for them.

[Niwantaw]

"Calm down boy, I'm happy to see you to"

i'll fix that as soon as i get home

[Niwantaw]

Well... the cogs that drive my brain finally started working...

sorry about the wait

now to find out if they stay working...

[Niwantaw]

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