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NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« on: January 10, 2013, 09:38:12 pm »
Hi folks,  I can't get the touchpad to do anything other than allow me to read the first nine chapters that I wrote,  so I will contact my brother,  and see how close he is to getting the last part that he needs to button up the kntebook and send it to me. I will let you fine folks know tomorrow as soon as I talk to my brother.
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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #1 on: January 19, 2013, 02:35:39 pm »
The first ten Chapters are loaded in two packets. The first nine in one, and the tenth in the second. From now on, each Chapter gets loaded by itself.
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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #2 on: January 19, 2013, 03:57:41 pm »

It was a booger getting Niri's computer to copy her story and save it as a document!

Her set up is slightly different than my own, and I think her computer was being a butt-head, but we whipped it into shape!

The proof will be when she tries to post her NEXT chapter!


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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #3 on: February 09, 2013, 08:41:50 pm »
Kaltxì ma Niri Te. That's sad that just a few people or nobody read it. :( However, I just read it. :)

As we read, we can understand the progression of the story and know what's happenning. ;)

I read the nine chapters. It's great.
« Last Edit: February 09, 2013, 09:17:52 pm by Kameyu a Kepekmì »

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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #4 on: February 09, 2013, 09:23:11 pm »
Kaltxì ma Niri Te,
So, I've read your fan-fiction from chapter one to chapter twenty. It is great! :D
My 'English-translation-part' in my brain burns extremely, I'm not a native English speaker, but I like your story. :)

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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #5 on: February 09, 2013, 09:29:44 pm »
Thank you both, I try to keep the story "real" where it comes to the piloting, and the Science. I always check out what NASA is studying for the future of inter stellar spacecraft to keep my Science in the story honest. I will be copying their proposed plans for their FTL experiments as to what drives the transport, I am up to my ears in their anti-matter drive papers that are not Classified.
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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #6 on: February 09, 2013, 09:33:42 pm »
Oh, oe skxawng. :o :-[ :-X
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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #7 on: February 09, 2013, 09:38:20 pm »
My 'English-translation-part' in my brain burns extremely, I'm not a native English speaker, but I like your story. :)
Mine too. And I just read chapter 1 to 9!

But it works and we can read the story well. :)

So, I've read your fan-fiction from chapter one to chapter twenty. It is great! :D
:o :D

Thank you both.
You're welcome.

I try to keep the story "real" where it comes to the piloting, and the Science. I always check out what NASA is studying for the future of inter stellar spacecraft to keep my Science in the story honest. I will be copying their proposed plans for their FTL experiments as to what drives the transport, I am up to my ears in their anti-matter drive papers that are not Classified.
Niri Tawa
That's good, but you can put fictional science in your story.

Oh, oe skxawng. :o :-[ :-X
Tswa'...
Karma ngaru nang! ;) :D
Oe lu skxawng :o :-[ :-X


Tswama'...

Nìteng karmati ngaru.
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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #8 on: February 10, 2013, 08:28:11 am »
I read the rest of the story. It's great! :D It is clear, so we can follow the story easly as we read it. Also, it is nice that you include Na'vi words.

Also, you need to check the (involountary) mistakes. ;)

Will be there more chapters?
« Last Edit: February 10, 2013, 11:30:47 am by Kameyu a Kepekmì »

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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #9 on: March 09, 2013, 08:49:18 pm »
Kaltxì ma Niri Te,

fan-fictionìri ngeyä lu kosman sì lor!
Oel teiìng ngati karma nìtxan nang.

Eywa ngahu!

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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #10 on: April 09, 2013, 10:29:45 am »
Kaltxì ma Niri Te,

Tse, karma ngaru nìtxan ultxe fìvur lu kosman!
Oel vin ngaru salew fìvur akosman.
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Eywa ngahu!

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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #11 on: April 09, 2013, 12:31:35 pm »
 Kaltxi oeya tsmukan. I would like to add you as one of the main characters on the ISV that the "Old Dog" is getting ready to dock with in a few days. I found your first name, and the first initial of  ihre famillian name, and need to to know what your last name is if you want me to use it as the name of the German Born, German trained Surgeon on the ISV.
 THANK YOU for your kind comments, and feel free to offer suggestions to the story here oeya 'eylan.
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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #12 on: April 09, 2013, 12:49:11 pm »
 :o :-[ Ketsukspaw!
Irayo nìtxan!

Kaltxi oeya tsmukan. I would like to add you as one of the main characters on the ISV that the "Old Dog" is getting ready to dock with in a few days. I found your first name, and the first initial of  ihre famillian name, and need to to know what your last name is if you want me to use it as the name of the German Born, German trained Surgeon on the ISV.
You will get a PM about it. ;)

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Re: NIRI TE FEEDBACK
« Reply #13 on: April 24, 2013, 09:38:04 pm »
Very much enjoying the story.  :D  Love all the technical details and the attention to demeanor and decorum. :)

 

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