Pasha, an Avatar story.

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Toliman

Quote from: Toliman on June 01, 2020, 06:04:37 PM
Tomorrow I will find time for reading.
Read, very good again! :)
Keep your writing, you make it in excellent way!

archaic

Another piece, I'd probbably start numbering these, so .....


Part 12
Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

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Toliman

Nice work again :)

Yeah, start numbering these - good idea!

archaic

#43
Part 13 .....
I must apologize for the Na'vi in this.



Edit:- Corrected some of the Na'vi dialogue, Massive thanks to Toliman for his help.
Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

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Toliman

Nice! :)
Tomorrow I will look on it.

Toliman

Read, good writen! :)

Quote from: archaic on June 08, 2020, 06:48:33 PM
I must apologize for the Na'vi in this.
No need apologize :)
Quote"Firawng lu piak si, taweyka tsa'u zum."
What you wanted to say here exactly?

archaic

"That's what opens the door."
or maybe
"That's what unblocks the doorway."

The point is, she already knows she can't escape, because the air outside her 'vivarium' is toxic to her. Now it maybe petty much academic, but she has understood how to trip the inner door to open from inside .....
Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

The Dragon Affair my last fanfic, non Avatar related.

Toliman

Quote from: archaic on June 10, 2020, 05:46:11 AM
"That's what opens the door."
or maybe
"That's what unblocks the doorway."

I am not sure, but I would say it in this way:

Tsa'u sleyku futa rawng lu piak.

archaic

#48
Part 14 .....

A massive thank you to Plumps for his help with the Na'vi dialogue!


Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

The Dragon Affair my last fanfic, non Avatar related.

Toliman

Nice, next new part! I will read tomorrow :)

archaic

Quote from: Toliman on June 10, 2020, 09:12:53 AM
Quote from: archaic on June 10, 2020, 05:46:11 AM
"That's what opens the door."
or maybe
"That's what unblocks the doorway."

I am not sure, but I would say it in this way:

Tsa'u sleyku futa rawng lu piak.
Fixed.
Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

The Dragon Affair my last fanfic, non Avatar related.

Toliman

Quote from: archaic on June 11, 2020, 05:44:08 PM
Quote from: Toliman on June 10, 2020, 09:12:53 AM
Quote from: archaic on June 10, 2020, 05:46:11 AM
"That's what opens the door."
or maybe
"That's what unblocks the doorway."

I am not sure, but I would say it in this way:

Tsa'u sleyku futa rawng lu piak.
Fixed.
:)
I just hope that my idea is right.

Toliman

Quote from: Toliman on June 11, 2020, 05:41:39 PM
Nice, next new part! I will read tomorrow :)
And I read - very good :)

archaic

#53
Part 14a .....






Part 15 .....


Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

The Dragon Affair my last fanfic, non Avatar related.

Toliman

Txantsan! Tomorrow I find time for reading.

Toliman

Read, very good again!

I wish I would be good writter too...

archaic

I've messed up, I've posted the last piece out of order.
So I've cheated and inserted the piece I missed out as Part 14a (Canceled cancelation), in before Part 15. Which puts it back in the order I should have posted it in, in the first place.
My bad.
Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

The Dragon Affair my last fanfic, non Avatar related.

Toliman

Never mind, your work is very good :)

archaic

Part 16 .....


Pasha, an Avatar story, my most recent fanfic, Avatar related, now complete.

The Dragon Affair my last fanfic, non Avatar related.

Toliman