Second story -No title yet :(

[Nawma_taronyu]

http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AZd57T6Kq54pZGdkY2JiZjVfMzJ0ZHMzcmN3&hl=en you can read or download it from here, it is far to large of file to post here

[Niwantaw]

trivia for those yet to read...
43 pages on word
26740 words...

this might take a while.....

name suggestion no.1 first contact

[Swoka Ikran]

Very good story. Looking at many of the same situations from both perspectives was quite interesting.

[Muzer]

Very good, but could REALLY do with some proof reading. The wrong homophones were really irritating me as I read, lol

[Swoka Ikran]

Quite a few fanfics on here have that issue. It irritates me too.

[Tsamsiyu92]

There is one flaw with your story. Human beings can not breath the air on Pandora, not becasue it's lacking oxygen, but due to the more active vulcanos on the planet, there's one which is lethal for human beings to breath.

(source: The game's pandopedia and the fact that they wear gas-masks in the movie)

But anyways, im on chapter 4 and looking forward to read more, but now i really have to study for the exam.

[Muzer]

It's quite obviously a "parallel universe"-style fanfic, as the Omatikaya clan exists but has none of the people we are familiar with in it.

[Nawma_taronyu]

and i did specify at the beginning that the air is not toxic to humans in this universe

[Niwantaw]

*high fives Nawm_taronyu*

parallel universes rule

[Tsamsiyu92]

39 CHAPTERS?! O_O

Guess who's going to be lifeless the next days...

EDIT: On chapter 19 now, very well written in my quite honest opinion. Keep it up!
EDIT2: On chapter 35 now, I really like it.

EDIT3: Beatiful ending.