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Offline Eywayä Irrtok

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Story
« on: December 30, 2009, 02:36:51 am »
Ok guys, I have finally writting a short hunting story. here it is:

Txon mawey lolu. Ke’u rolikx. Tsatseng pak! Hi’ia tìrikx mì ayutral lìmu. Oel tolul, tse’era atxkxeti. Atxkxe plltxe ne Na’vi. Tsnì lu tìlatem ta ayTawtute ne Na’vi. Ayfo ke ting mikyun.  Ha oel tolul, teraron Nantangti. Oe tse’ole po. Oel mungole oeyä Tskoti ulte toling po swizaw. Tsakrr, oe lonolu swizaw. Po ngay sì sìltsan lolu. Po takoluk Nantang mì txe’lan.  Oe tolul ne po. “Eywa ngahu tsmuke, poe ngahu layu. Oe nìletìngay irayo.”


Please tell me  whether I have used -l and -ti correctly, also please say whether there was any place that called for -ru. General spelling/grammar crits are also very much appreciated.

Irayo!
Tìng mikyun nìltsan, fì’u fya’o ne tslayam letok lu -- mune sì mune tsìng lu.

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Re: Story
« Reply #1 on: January 20, 2010, 10:31:29 pm »
Ma Eywa! The simple fact that you can write so much speaks volumes about your understanding. I'm not nearly and expert yet and I sometimes feel limited by the relatively small vocabulary. This is great! It was fun to read and a nice challenge to excercize the translation skills.
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Offline Na'rìngeyä Toruk

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Re: Story
« Reply #2 on: January 21, 2010, 09:51:38 am »
Oel tolul, tse’era atxkxeti.
I suspect the verb "tul" does not need a ergative marker (-l), but it's just a hunch. Compare these two examples:

I run.
I put.

Which one makes proper sense? The upper one. Which is tul. Because:

I put.
WHAT did you put? And WHERE?

So I don't think it needs an -l, again, just a hunch, better leave it to the local grammar nazi's ;)

Eywa ngahu.
Spivaw oeti rutxe, ma oeyä eylan. Fi'u ke lìmu ta Eywa. Oeri uniltìranyuyä 'eveng lu, ulte oe layu 'awpo Eywayä.

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Re: Story
« Reply #3 on: January 23, 2010, 01:58:42 am »
Nice little story there :) You should write another one.

Offline Eywayä Irrtok

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Re: Story
« Reply #4 on: February 02, 2010, 02:54:32 am »
Irayo, irayo, ma tsmukan. Oe layu :)
Tìng mikyun nìltsan, fì’u fya’o ne tslayam letok lu -- mune sì mune tsìng lu.

 

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