Tirea Tskoyä - The comments thread

[Ikranä mokri]

please any comments, good or bad, that you have about Tiera Tskoyä are welcome on here. I will comment on how i think a chapter went (when its finished) and any inspirations that I had.

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

i think the last couple chapters (so far) have been to short. try to make them longer a little.

[Ikranä mokri]

there unfinished rl is being a bit of a biatch atm so finding time to write is ok

[Ateyo te Kellett]

wow. really good work. I read it without taking my eyes of it. though there are a few grammatical misstakes and a few wrong words. But I hope you'll continue writing 1+ for you

[Ikranä mokri]

wrong words?? if u mean in Na'Vi im gonna go through and try to change stuff at a later date and thanks for the Karma XD

[Ateyo te Kellett]

I don't remember which ones, but there was only one or two.

I don't know if it was intentional, but is neytiri supposed to say My Jake or ma Jake? :p

[Ikranä mokri]

i probably meant to say my cause some of the mistakes are dileberate, due to the fact that Alec has no training at all so he doesnt understand a word of Na'Vi

[Ateyo te Kellett]

sent you an email with my opinions.there are not alot of good response, mostly corrections, but know that i think this is really nice work!!!
hope you like it.

[Ikranä mokri]

I realised why i keep switching from 1st to 3rd person, orginally the story was gonna be 3rd person but i changed it to 1st after i had writen quite a bit, so i must have missed some stuff.

Ateyo te Kellett you thing is very helpful in showing where I have gone wrong Karma for you XD

[Ateyo te Kellett]

i see. irayo.

I will get to the other chapters too, but i have a spanish essay to write tonight. will continue afterwards.

[Ikranä mokri]

Chapter 4 and 5 have been updated (slightly) will continue on them now or asap.


(there will be a lot of posts saying stuff like this as I write my story straight onto the board out of my head)

[Ateyo te Kellett]

nice will read it before going to bed

[Ikranä mokri]

These songs I have been using for my motivation whilst writing

cause they are awsome

AVATAR SOUNDTRACK 2009 - 02 - Jake Enters His Avatar World BY JAMES HORNER.wmv

AVATAR SOUNDTRACK 2009 - 04 - The Bioluminescence Of The Night BY JAMES HORNER.wmv

AVATAR SOUNDTRACK 2009 - 07 - Jake's First Flight BY JAMES HORNER.wmv

AVATAR SOUNDTRACK 2009 - 06 - Climbing Up Iknimaya - The Path To Heaven BY JAMES HORNER.wmv

[Niwantaw]

i just have the whole soundtrack on loop while i write....

[Ikranä mokri]

I prefer to have songs which are kinda linked to what I want with the story and then go with what my mind throws at me and what my heart feels is good

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

honestlly i dont listen to the avatar soundtrack when i do my book

[Niwantaw]

*slap*

how can you not listen to it??!

[Ikranä mokri]

*melodramatic intake of breath*

what, I listen to it but i also listen to stuff like Papa roach, Ramstien and Linken park which also get me thinking creatively lol (i dont know why)

[Duma Vadamee {Aungia Tsawkeyä}]

exactly, (reslaps Tawtute akawng) thats what you get for not being openminded!

[Niwantaw]

*slaps duma again*

hey i didn't say you had to only listen to it

only that you must listen to at least part of it

*pulls out a "problem solver"*

any further arguments will be answered by Mr boom-stick here