You Choose How The Story Will Turn Out!

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QuoteA rustle in the bushes. The yerik's ears perk up. It's eyes glimmer in the sunlight that filters through the thick jungle canopy above. It looks around, eventually returning to it's grazing of the lush flora of the planet's surface.

A whistling through the air. The yerik slumps, it's eyes slowly glassing over as it's spirit passes into the world around it.

A tall, slender being slowly breaks through into the clearing. The figure leans over the yerik, gently pulling the arrow out of the beast.

"Oel ngati kameie, ma Tsmukan, ulte ngaru seiyi irayo. Ngaru hu Eywa saleu tirea, tokx 'ì'awn slu Na'viyä hapxì."

The figure thrusts the sacred blade into the beast. It becomes still, and the figure closes it's eyes in silence, honouring the fallen beast.

"that was a good kill Txan, it would have made your sempul proud. To carry the honours through so well deserves mention to the eyktan himself."
Txan raised himself from the fallen beast, sheathing his blade into a small pouch around his waist. He laughed.

"the eyktan himself eh? What an honour that would be indeed. Of course, I would have to thank my marvellous numeyu, for it was he who taught me what I know. Then again, he did manage to scare off half the forest with his great clumsy footsteps. What say you to that, ma Atan?"

Atan glanced over to Txan, with a look of devastation on his face.

"me? I wasn't the one who stood on that rock just as we were going to get a whole pack of them!"

"but they never heard me, they continued with their grazing!"

"true, but they did hear you yell in pain. Fpi Eywa, you yelled so loud you would have thought Toruk was eating your foot, not a rock!"

Atan's surly face slowly broke into a friendly grin. He playfully punched his student on the arm, turning around and looking through a gap in the forest roof at the great tree Kelutrel.

"it will be dark soon. It's best we head back now, before we get caught outside and miss dinner AGAIN."

Txan chuckled. "why is it that I can depend on you to think with your stomach? Come here and help me with this. If you want to make it to your precious dinner, you can at least help me carry what we are meant to be eating back home."


So that was just something I came up with on a bus trip the other day, and i will hopefully be continuing it into a properly lengthened fanfic. However, i though a cooler idea would be to see what you guys thought the next step for these two warriors should be!

So, this is how this is going to work. Today, where I am, is Monday. On Friday, I will collate possible next steps from this thread, and over the weekend will write a new part! (Hopefully longer than this) So from now on, Every Monday, I will be uploading a new part to this fanfic!

Please do give criticism, It always helps.

So that's the general idea. Please do post an idea for the next bit, I'll be eager to see what people come up with. If you like someone else's idea, quote it. If there are many quotes for one idea, that will override my own judgement. If all ideas are different, I will pick the idea I think is most fun/creative!

Use your Eltu's!

So for now, I leave you ma smukan. Next section will be up on Monday. You have my word. :D

Atoki
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