Vur Pa'liä

[Tswusayona Tsamsiyu]

kaltxì ma oeyä eylan
here's a little story I wrote and I would like to know what you think.

Vur Pa'liä
Oe lu pa'li.
Oeri solalew zìsìt apxey.
Kelku seri oe Na'vihu mì na'rìng takrra 'olongokx.
Yawne lu oeru oeyä soaia alu sempu, sa'nu sì smuk oeyä.
Yawne lu oeru oeyä maktoyu nìteng.
'awsiteng kerä fratseng.

Nerume moe fte slivu nawma mesamsiyu.
Maktoyul oeyä nerume futa toltem tsko swizawfa.
Oel nerume futa kxll si sì tìran nìfnu.
Kop maktoyul oeyä nerume futa wem ulte oe tskxekeng seri tìtusul sì tìspusä.

Zene moe tskxkeng sivi talun sawtute werem ayoehu.

Oel fpìl futa sawtute tsun rivey hu Na'vi nìmwey sì nìfpom.
Pelun zene wivem sawtute hu Na'vi?
Ayoe tsun tìkangkem sivi sì rivey 'awsiteng.
Txo fì'u ke flivä tsakrr sawtute zayene hivum Eywa'evengit.

Pxaya sute terkup mì sam ulte keng Eywa ke tsun srung sivi frakrr.
Sìlpey oe tsnì srung zìyeva'u ye'rìn.

[Carborundum]

Not bad! A few mistakes here and there, but I had no trouble understanding everything.

kaltxì ma oeyä eylan
here's a little story I wrote and I would like to know what you think.

Vur Pa'liä
Oe lu pa'li.
Rerey oe pxezìsìto.¹
Rerey oe Na'vihu mì na'rìng takrra 'olongokx.
Yawne lu oeru oeyä soaia alu sempu sì² sa'nu sì smuk oeyä.
Yawne lu oeru oeyä maktoyu nìteng.
'awsiteng kerä ne³ fratseng.

Nerume moe fte slivu nawma mesamsiyu.
Maktoyu oeyä nerume futa⁴ toltem tsko swizawfa.
Oe nerume kxll sì futa⁴ tìran nìfnu.
Kop maktoyu oeyä nerume futa⁴ wem ulte oe tskxekeng seri tìtusul sì tìspusä.

Zene moe tskxkeng sivi talun sawtute werem ayoehu.

Oel fpìl futa sawtute tsun rivey hu Na'vi nìmwey sì nìfpom.
Pelun zene wivem sawtute hu Na'vi?
Ayoe tsun tìkangkem sivi sì rivey 'awsiteng.
Txo fì'u ke flivä tsakrr⁵ sawtute ziyevayene⁶ hivum Eywa'evengit.

Pxaya sute terkup mì sam ulte keng Eywa ke tsun srung sivi frakrr.
Sìlpey oe tsnì srung zìyeva'u⁷ ye'rìn.

• 1. The idiomatic way to say I am X years old in Na'vi is oeri solalew zìsìt a-[X]. In this case, oeri solalew zìsìt apxey.
• 2. This sì is not necessary (but not incorrect), just as you don't need to say father and mother and sibling.
• 3. This ne is also not necessary (and also not incorrect); when the destination of a movement (in this case fratseng) immediately follows the verb of movement (in this case kä), no adposition is required.
• 4. In all three of these examples you have two verbs in the same clause with nothing explaining their internal order. You must put the verb being learnt in a relative clause. I have used futa here, but we don't actually know that nume is transitive, so fwa might be better. Alternatively you could use fte and the subjunctive as you did in the first sentence of this paragraph.
• 5. In if - then sentences, the then part is initiated by tsakrr.
• 6. The verb in the then part only takes the future tense.
• 7. The subjunctive must be used together with tsnì.

[Sireayä mokri]

Rerey oe Na'vihu mì na'rìng takrra 'olongokx.

Probably it should be kelku si oe Na'vihu...

And I agree with Carborundum, it's a great try ma Tswusayona Tsamsiyu!

[Carborundum]

Rerey oe Na'vihu mì na'rìng takrra 'olongokx.

Probably it should be kelku si oe Na'vihu...

True, I missed that.

[Tswusayona Tsamsiyu]

irayo nìtxan ma mesmuk
eyawr soli oeyä kxeyeyit oel

but I have one question. if I put futa into the sentences in the second paragraph shouldn't I put an agentive case on the learner?
and also, shouldn't the second futa come right after the nerume?

[Carborundum]

irayo nìtxan ma mesmuk
eyawr soli oeyä kxeyeyit oel

but I have one question. if I put futa into the sentences in the second paragraph shouldn't I put an agentive case on the learner?

You are correct, you should.

and also, shouldn't the second futa come right after the nerume?

No, because the futa acts as an anchor noun for the clause "walk silently". Since the first thing listed (kxll) is a noun, the second must be as well. If you use kxll si instead, the futa would need to come right after nerume.