(valentine's day poem) Ne Kìreysì, oeyä ‘eylan le’aw a oe tsun kivame

[Irtaviš Ačankif]

Blanked.

[Blue Elf]

Lora way, txantsan!

Aysäplltxevi:
Pxaya ayzìsìkrr, txana tìkawng, ... with "pxay" noun remains in singular
Lu keftxo nìtxan fwa oe nì'aw...
Na hì'ang a mì tompa apxa
tì'efu sì tìkame moeyä nìkì'ong ... hmm, I don't understand how "nìk'ong" fits here - can you provide English text?
stum ultxa sängi hu kxitx. ... ultxa is noun, you need "ultxa si" or "ultxarun"

Slä oel omeium futa fko ke kame fa menari, ke ki? fa memikyun... (intended meaning would be useful to propose correct words)
Nìrangal oel tsirvun tivok tsenget a ngal tok

[Kamean]

Way akosman!

[Alyara Arati]

Lora way nìtxan.

One thing, since you are speaking of "oe sì nga", it would be better to use "oeng" than "moe"; that way you are including the person you're speaking with.

[Irtaviš Ačankif]

Corrected.

[Alyara Arati]

moeyä sirea

still needs to be fixed, but I'm glad we were able to add a little constructive criticism.

[Irtaviš Ačankif]

Fixed.