another small poem

[Syulang]

So I made another poem, this one is supposed to be about Kelutral  please correct any mistakes I've made 

Fi'u koak utral
Awnga nìwotx tirey mìfa nga
Ngaru ayvul hawnu ulte tihawnu ayoeng
Awnga syaw nga Kelutral
Awnga lu ngaru Na'viyä

[Tirea Aean]

Nice Here's my take. (i personally tend to use ayoeng when no cases, and awnga when i use cases. ex ayoeng, but awngaru, awngal, awngati)

Fìutral akoak
Ayoeng nìwotx kelku si mìfa nga
Ngari ayvul tìhawnu si awngar
Ayoeng syaw ngaru Kelutral
Ayoeng lu ngeyä Na'vi

Why not write in the Pamrel nìNa'vi nì'aw? It's the one-stop place to post your Na'vi poems/stories/whatever (except music, there's anotehr board for that )

Only na'vi required there is your original piece. discussion in English. (though many comments might be in Na'vi)

[Syulang]

I jut post in beginners I guess so i can get corrected and stuff, and I'm a beginner hrh   I'm still using the dictionary and stuff. I could repost it in the stories section. or maybe it could be moved?

[Tirea Aean]

I was just asking if you'd like this stuff moved there, it's up to you. not a must. (it's just what those boards, buried as they are, are for )

Feel free to keep posting your work here if you want. I was also kinda letting people know about those two places for original na'vi work and translations.

http://forum.learnnavi.org/pamrel-ninavi-niaw/ (na'vi stories, poems, literature)

http://forum.learnnavi.org/pamtseo-ninavi-niaw/ (original Na'vi songs, or translated songs into na'vi)