IKRANA TSWAYONYU

[Ateyo Te Syaksyuk]

Irayo, Tirea Aean, oeyä karyu fpì srung
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IKRANÄ TSWAYONYU
Oe mìn nìtxa' ftär
Oe mìn nìtxa' skien
Titswusayonìri moe lu 'aw
Oeyä ikran sì oe
Txur, seykxel
'Efu hufwet
A oeri mesyalit spule
Nefä, nefä
Kxamlä taw aean
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IKRAN FLYER
I turn very hard left
I turrn very hard right
We are one in flight
My ikran and I
Very strong   
I feel the wind
Carrying my wings
Upwards Upwards
Through the  blue skies

[Blue Elf]

that's really good! +1
Just two notes:
- if you really to say "blue skies", use plural: (ay)saw aean
- not sure if we can use nìtxa' is sense you used it, but in poetry some rule breaks are allowed

Nice work!

[Ateyo Te Syaksyuk]

Irayo Ma Blue Elf!
I missed the pluralization of skies.
Irayo, good catch!
As for nìtxa, I think I decided to keep it as a rule break simply for the flow.
Eventually, I will devise a song/performance piece.
But first I must memorize it!

[Kamean]

Wery well!

+1

[Alyara Arati]

This is so good!   Thanks both to you and Tirea Aean.

[Tirea Aean]

Kaltxì ma Ateyo! I'm glad you posted this!

Irayo, Tirea Aean, oeyä karyu fpì srung

Srungìri irayo ma Tirea Aean alu oeyä karyu

: Nìprrte' ma oeyä numeyu.

that's really good! +1
Just two notes:
- if you really to say "blue skies", use plural: (ay)saw aean
- not sure if we can use nìtxa' is sense you used it, but in poetry some rule breaks are allowed

Nice work!

Well, i didnt correct skies into plural because i dont think it makes a lot of sense to have more than one sky(this doesnt even make sense to me in English actually, but it is still said?) and i didnt think it was significant.

i had the same thought about nìtxa' but it is at least understandable asd can imo suffice until a more fitting word comes along.

[Puvomun]

Very nice poem, yes. Well done.