Sutetsyìp

[Puvomun]

Puvomunìl sì Amhulìl tswamayon feyä mikranit.

"Ma puvomun, nìn tsatseng." Amhulä tsyokx lamu nena'ring. Mefol tsame'a tsengit peseng Sawtutel kamlkulat klltet.
Puvomun 'amefu keftxo. Tseng mì na'ring lamu tsawl sì ke lor. Mì klltxe, tìtìran, tsatseng lamam fpom nì'ul. "Tewti..." poan pamltxe. Fì'u sraw lamu. Poan namìn tsatsenge, ulte poan fpamìl ne tsam mìkam Na'vi sì Sawtute. Pelun, poan päpamawn. Pelum fìtsam? Txana ayzìsìt fra'u lamu sìltsan...
Sawtute... lì'u pam si mì Puvomunä re'o. "San Sawtute sìk lì'u ke lu yawne oeru set," poan pamltxe.
"Peu?" Amhul pamawn.
"San sawtute sìk lì'u plltxe uti akawng oeru. Sawtutel tìsraw seykami Eywa'evengit. Sute alahe, fo ke lu naSawtute."
Amhul 'amì'awn tìfnu ulte poe fpamìl. "Mllte oe, ma yawne. Fo ke lu Sawtute ke nì'ul. Feyä hunsip ke tswayon ke nì'ul. Set fo lu Sutetsyìp."
Puvomun hamahaw. Sutetsyìp, srane, fo lamu Sutetsyìp set.

Spoiler: Original English

(Adding this, which is a snip of writing in my Fanfiction Sky People, so it makes kind of sense. I am sure the Na'vi is permeated with errors. I made some liberal assumptions here and there. )


"Ma Puvomun, look there." Amhul pointed to a speck in the jungle. It was where the mine of the Sky People had been.
To his surprise, the location was still clearly visible from up here, while as they were lower it seemed a lot more covered by new trees and plants already. "That is... amazing," he ended. He had no word for the pain he felt inside. Seeing that small spot down there brought back memories of the fights between Omatikaya and Sawtute, in the years after everything had seemed to go so well.
Sawtute... the word rang in his mind. "I don't like the word Sawtute anymore," he told Amhul.
"Why not?"
"It reminds of the bad things. The people who hurt Eywa'eveng, Pandora. The ones that are still here are not like them, they are not Sawtute anymore."
Amhul considered this in silence for some time. "Oe mllte. I agree. They are not Sky People in more ways than one, because their flying machines do not work anymore. They now are just the Little People. Sutetsyìp."
Puvomun laughed as he heard the word. The name. Yes. Sutetsyìp. That was who they were now.

[Blue Elf]

Tse, ma Puvomun, vur asìltsan. Slä.... tsal nga' kxeyeyit apxay (ngaytxoa)

Here's my rewritten version (although nor I can guarantee correctness )

Puvomun sì Amhul tswamayon fa feyä meikran.
"Ma Puvomun, tìng nari tsatsengur." Amhulä tsyokxìl wìntxu tsengit mì na'ring. Mefol tsame'a pesenget Sawtutel kllkolulat klltet.
Puvomun 'amefu keftxo. Tseng mì na'rìng lamu apxa sì vä'. Tsaw lamam lefpom nì'ul, krr a mefo kllkxem mì hllte. "Tewti..." poan pamlltxe ulte 'amefu tìsrawit. Poan namìn tsatsenget ulte fpamìl teri tsam mìkam Na'vi sì Sawtute. Pelun, poan päpamawn. Pelun fìtsam? Txana ayzìsìtsre fra'u lamu sìltsan...
Sawtute... lì'u pam si mì Puvomunä re'o. "San Sawtute sìk lì'u ke lu yawne oeru set," poan pamlltxe.
"Pelun?" Amhul pamawn.
"San sawtute sìk lì'u plltxe teri ayu akawng. Sawtutel tìsraw seykami Eywa'evengit. Tsaysute alahe a tok fìtsenget ke lu na Sawtute."
Amhul var fnivu ulte poe fpamìl. "Mllte oe, ma yawne. Fo ke lu Sawtute li. Feyä hunsìp ke tsun tswivayon li. Set fo lu Sutetsyìp."
Puvomun hamahaw. Sutetsyìp, srane, fo lamu Sutetsyìp set.


Some of common mistakes: some typos (single l in plltxe, kllkulat), transitivity (tswayon is vin, nìn is vtr), lenition (mì hllte (t here is not ejective ))
Well, but I still read that with pleasure, not many writers are here....

[Sireayä mokri]

Tam, I'll take the Elf's version for final corrections:

Puvomun sì Amhul tswamayon fa mefeyä meikran.
"Ma Puvomun, tìng nari tsatsengur." Amhulä tsyokxìl wìntxu tsengit a mì na'ring. Mefol tsame'a petsenget a Sawtutel kllkolulat klltet.
Puvomun 'amefu keftxo. Tseng a mì na'rìng lamu apxa sì vä'. Tsaw lamam lefpom nì'ul, krr a mefo kllkxem mì hllte. "Tewti..." poan pamlltxe ulte 'amefu tìsrawit. Poan namìn tsatsenget ulte fpamìl teri tsam a mìkam Na'vi sì Sawtute. Pelun, poan päpamawn. Pelun fìtsam? Txana Pxaya ayzìsìtsre fra'u lamu sìltsan...
Sawtute... lì'u pam si mì PFuvomunä re'o. "San Sawtute sìk lu a lì'u ke lu yawne oeru set," poan pamlltxe.
"Pelun?" Amhul pamawn.
"San sawtute sìk lu a lì'u plltxe teri ayu akawng. Sawtutel tìsraw seykami Eywa'evengit. Tsaysute alahe a tok fìtsenget ke lu na Sawtute."
Amhul var fnivu ulte poe fpamìl. "Mllte oe, ma yawnetu. Fo ke lu Sawtute li. Feyä hunsìp ke tsun tswivayon li. Set fo lu Sutetsyìp."
Puvomun hamahaw hamangham. Sutetsyìp, srane, fo lamu Sutetsyìp set.

Ulte mllte, sunu oer fwa tse'a 'uoti amip fìtseng

[Kamean]

Ma Puvomum, sìltsana pamreltsyìp.

[Puvomun]

Ma Puvomum, sìltsana pamreltsyìp.

Irayo, ma frapo, fpi eyawr si oeyä aylì'u.

Oel omum futa vur lu sìltsan nì'ul mì Ìnglìsì.

[Sireayä mokri]

Irayo, ma frapo, fpi eyawr si oeyä aylì'u.

I'd say "furia oeyä aylì'uti eyawr sleykolu, irayo, ma frapo."

[Blue Elf]

Puvomun sì Amhul tswamayon fa mefeyä meikran.

Hmm, what about number principle - number should be expressed only once? Mefeyä ikran should be more correct, I think, but now see that there's space for ambiguity (theirs two ikrans vs. ikran of they two)

Txana Pxaya ayzìsìtsre fra'u lamu sìltsan...

Well, I think "before" would be better in original - otherwise I agree

Puvomun hamahaw hamangham. Sutetsyìp, srane, fo lamu Sutetsyìp set.[/i]

HRH, I didn't notice it in original, that's really funny

[Alyara Arati]

Tam, I'll take the Elf's version for final corrections:

Puvomun sì Amhul tswamayon fa mefeyä meikran.
San" Ma Puvomun, tìng nari tsatsengur."sìk.  Amhulä tsyokxìl wìntxu tsengit a mì na'ring. Mefol tsame'a petsenget a Sawtutel kllkolulat klltet.
Puvomun 'amefu keftxo. Tseng a mì na'rìng lamu apxa sì vä'. Tsaw lamam lefpom nì'ul, krr a mefo kllkxem mì hllte. San" Tewti..."sìk poan pamlltxe ulte 'amefu tìsrawit. Poanìl namìn tsatsenget ulte fpamìl teri tsam a mìkam Na'vi sì Sawtute. Pelun, poan päpamawn. Pelun fìtsam? Txana Pxaya ayzìsìtsre fra'u lamu sìltsan...
Sawtute... lì'u pam si mì PFuvomunä re'o. San" San Sawtute sìk lu a lì'u ke lu yawne oeru set,"sìk poan pamlltxe.
San" Pelun?"sìk Amhul pamawn.
San" San sawtute sìk lu a lì'u plltxe teri ayu akawng. Sawtutel tìsraw seykami Eywa'evengit. Tsaysute alahe a tok fìtsenget ke lu na Sawtute."sìk.
Amhul var fnivu ulte poe fpamìl. San" Mllte oe, ma yawnetu. Fo ke lu Sawtute li. Feyä hunsìp ke tsun tswivayon li. Set fo lu Sutetsyìp."sìk.
Puvomun hamahaw hamangham. Sutetsyìp, srane, fo lamu Sutetsyìp set.

Ulte mllte, sunu oer fwa tse'a 'uoti amip fìtseng

Tewti ma Puvomun!  Furia nga pamrel seri fìtsenge teya si oeru.

[Puvomun]

Tewti ma Puvomun!  Furia nga pamrel seri fìtsenge teya si oeru.

Irayo, ma Alyara Arati, oe sìlpey tsnì oe pamrel sayi fitsenge nì'ul nìteng.

[Sireayä mokri]

Hmm, what about number principle - number should be expressed only once? Mefeyä ikran should be more correct, I think, but now see that there's space for ambiguity (theirs two ikrans vs. ikran of they two)

Yes, that's why I'd rather use dual. KH still confuses me a lot sometimes...

[Blue Elf]

Hmm, what about number principle - number should be expressed only once? Mefeyä ikran should be more correct, I think, but now see that there's space for ambiguity (theirs two ikrans vs. ikran of they two)

Yes, that's why I'd rather use dual. KH still confuses me a lot sometimes...

Oeri nìteng. I think Paul should give us more explanation...

[Kamean]

Hmm, what about number principle - number should be expressed only once? Mefeyä ikran should be more correct, I think, but now see that there's space for ambiguity (theirs two ikrans vs. ikran of they two)

Yes, that's why I'd rather use dual. KH still confuses me a lot sometimes...

Oeri nìteng. I think Paul should give us more explanation...

We will wait.