LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP

Started by Ateyo Te Syaksyuk, April 19, 2012, 07:38:46 PM

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Ateyo Te Syaksyuk

LULLABYE (Prrnen Hivahaw Tìroltsyip)

Hivahaw ma oeyä prrnen
Tìvung futa aysäfpil lìng neto
Ewya ngaru meyam mi mepxun
Zong~ Prrnen~ Hahaw Ma Tsmuketsyìp ko

Ateyo Te Syaksyuk

I like the words but I would like the second and fourth verses to rhyme
IF the second sentence is constructed properly!
Ending a lullabye with an O sound is more condusive for slumber :D

Alyara Arati

Hivahaw ma oeyä prrnen
Tivung futa fpìlfya lìng neto
Eywal ngati meyam mì mepun
Zong~ Prrnen~ Hahaw ma tsmuketsyìp ko

alternately, maybe "aysäfpil lìng neto"
Learn how to see.  Realize that everything connects to everything else.
~ Leonardo da Vinci

Blue Elf

Nice lullaby!
But IMHO fpìlfya is not good here, as it mean "way of thinking/though pattern". Aysäfpìl fits well, also ronsem is not bad

Hivahaw ma oeyä prrnen
Tivung futa ronsem lìng ayunilmì
Eywal ngati meyam mì mepun
Zong~ Prrnen~ Hahaw ma tsmuketsyìp ko
Oe lu skxawng skxakep. Slä oe nerume mi.
"Oe tasyätxaw ulte koren za'u oehu" (Limonádový Joe)


Ateyo Te Syaksyuk

Irayo Ma BlueElf.  Niprrte RONSEM slä nìprrte rhyming 'O'     HRH ;D
Ateyo

Kamean

Tse'a ngal ke'ut a krr fra'uti kame.


Ateyo Te Syaksyuk

IRAYO MA KAMEAN!  I HAVE IN MY HEAD A LOVELY TUNE IN MINOR KEY