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LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP
« on: April 19, 2012, 07:38:46 pm »
LULLABYE (Prrnen Hivahaw Tìroltsyip)

Hivahaw ma oeyä prrnen
Tìvung futa aysäfpil lìng neto
Ewya ngaru meyam mi mepxun
Zong~ Prrnen~ Hahaw Ma Tsmuketsyìp ko
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Re: LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP
« Reply #1 on: April 19, 2012, 07:46:55 pm »
I like the words but I would like the second and fourth verses to rhyme
IF the second sentence is constructed properly!
Ending a lullabye with an O sound is more condusive for slumber :D

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Re: LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP
« Reply #2 on: April 19, 2012, 08:59:08 pm »
Hivahaw ma oeyä prrnen
Tivung futa fpìlfya lìng neto
Eywal ngati meyam mì mepun
Zong~ Prrnen~ Hahaw ma tsmuketsyìp ko

alternately, maybe "aysäfpil lìng neto"
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Re: LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP
« Reply #3 on: April 20, 2012, 02:42:52 am »
Nice lullaby!
But IMHO fpìlfya is not good here, as it mean "way of thinking/though pattern". Aysäfpìl fits well, also ronsem is not bad

Hivahaw ma oeyä prrnen
Tivung futa ronsem lìng ayunilmì
Eywal ngati meyam mì mepun
Zong~ Prrnen~ Hahaw ma tsmuketsyìp ko
Oe lu skxawng skxakep. Slä oe nerume mi.
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Re: LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP
« Reply #4 on: April 21, 2012, 08:18:32 pm »
Irayo Ma BlueElf.  Niprrte RONSEM slä nìprrte rhyming 'O'     HRH ;D
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Re: LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP
« Reply #5 on: April 22, 2012, 10:46:31 am »
Pamrel asìltsan. :)
Tse'a ngal ke'ut a krr fra'uti kame.


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Re: LULLABYE (PRRNEN HIVAHAW TIROLTSYIP
« Reply #6 on: April 22, 2012, 07:01:41 pm »
IRAYO MA KAMEAN!  I HAVE IN MY HEAD A LOVELY TUNE IN MINOR KEY

 

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