Ta kaym vay txon

[Tanri]

Ikrano fìlmrrfen oeti, ulte pol oeru poleng ayokit sneyä. Set oel tsaysäfpìlit pereng ayngar.

[Tanri]

Srekrr tompa ftolang zivup,
ulte kllte ukxo sleru.

Hufwa mi taw lepwopx lu,
omum oel futa piak slìyu.

Aysyalur oeyä oe tskxekeng soli,
ulte kerä fte ultxa sivi hu sanhì.

Mawkrr io txayo atan afkew len,
nì'i'a pìwopx ftolang tsawkewä wivem.

Stum hawngkrr, li sreton'ong lu,
ulte mì swaw ator tsawkel relit alor ngerop.

Set oe ke tsun vivar tswivayon ne ayramtsyìp alìm,
zene nivìn tsayopinit alor, swawfpi aketsuktswa'.

Slä ke pereng oe san Eywa ngahu sìk, kaw'it,
ha san Kìyevame ulte Txon lefpom, ma tsawke! sìk.

Trr 'olì'awn uo oe, txonìl oeti perey,
fte muwivìntxu oeru sanhìt alu eylan moeyä.

Txon lu, polähem oe ne fäpa ayramtsyìpä,
na'rìng lefnu pxaw oe tstu slolu.

Keng hufwe ftolang tivìran li,
'änsyema kifkey wäpan mì aysìvawm.

Nì'aw pxeu fkeyterok - oe sì txon sì sanhì.
Lu txonur memikyun oeyä, lu sanhìru menari.

Oe pängkxo fohu luke aylì'u,
oel foti kameie ulte tslam.

Mawkrr tanhì letxep terul ka taw. Nang!
Nìwin oel fwew aylì'uti fte rivangal 'uot.

Oe ke tsun. Ke lu oeru kea aylì'u.
Rangal oel ayut apxay oefpi sì lapofpi sì kifkeyfpi.

Ke tsun piveng fìfrayut 'awsiteng,
tafral fnu oe, tengkrr tanhì letxep 'eria.

Äo aysyal oeyä terul kllte, tswayon oe ne kelku.
Fpom lu tirear oeyä.

Oe lu hapxì Eywayä, ha lu Eywa.
Oe lu hapxì kifkeyä, ha lu kifkey.
Oe fkeyteiok.

[Alyara Arati]

Txantsan lu!  Zene oe nivìn fì'uti nìmun.

[Blue Elf]

Fantastic! Another excellent writer here!
Just a few things:
- ulte kerä fte ultxa sivi hu sanhì - I'd didn't use kerä as ikran tswayon  
- fte muwivìntxu oeru sanhìt alu eylan moeyä - not completely clear to me, did you mean: to present me stars, a friends of us two? Or ... a friends of mine -> eylan oeyä ?
- na'rìng lefnu pxaw oe tstu slolu - also a little unclear -  quiet forest around me closed (got dark ?)
Anyway, great job.

[Sireayä mokri]

Lor nìtxan Ayuo oeru hek nì'it, slä sa'u tam nìwotx fìfnepamrelfpi. Ngian new oe pivlltxe fì'uteri:

Ke tsun piveng fìfrayut 'awsiteng,

Fìfray- should be a big compound infix then, which we haven't ever seen, but I just don't get what you want to say by it. These every things? If it's all these things, I'd go for fayut nìwotx.

[Tanri]

Ma eylan, oeru prrte' leiu fwa sunu ayngaru fìvurtsyìp. Aynga leiu tstunwi nìtxan.

- ulte kerä fte ultxa sivi hu sanhì - I'd didn't use kerä as ikran tswayon 
- fte muwivìntxu oeru sanhìt alu eylan moeyä - not completely clear to me, did you mean: to present me stars, a friends of us two? Or ... a friends of mine -> eylan oeyä ?
- na'rìng lefnu pxaw oe tstu slolu - also a little unclear -  quiet forest around me closed (got dark ?)

kerä - srane, ngaru tìyawr. Oe nolew piveng nì'ìnglìsì san and i am departing/leaving to meet with stars sìk
fte muwivìntxu oeru sanhìt alu eylan moeyä - ngaru tìyawr nìteng: "to present me stars, a friends of us two", moe lu oe sì txon
na'rìng lefnu pxaw oe tstu slolu - na nga poltxe, "quiet forest closed around me", fu "enclosed me in itself". Ke'u teri tìvawm.

Fìfray- should be a big compound infix then, which we haven't ever seen, but I just don't get what you want to say by it. These every things? If it's all these things, I'd go for fayut nìwotx.

Oe fpamìl "every these things", slä ral lu stum teng na "all these things". Lolu tìfmetok oeyä fwa fìme*prefix* sar mì lì'u a'aw.

[Kamean]

Sunu oer nìtxan.

[Tswusayona Tsamsiyu]

txantsan nìtxan nang!!! sleru tsulfätu nga ma Tanri. fìvurtsyìp oer suneiu nìwotx. irayo.

[Tanri]

Ke pxan, ma eylan. Kea tsulfätu ke li oe ke lu.
Nì'aw fmeri oe ralpiveng sì'efut oeyä fa lì'fya Na'viyä.

[Tswusayona Tsamsiyu]

ulte fìkem si nìltsan.

[Blue Elf]

kerä - srane, ngaru tìyawr. Oe nolew piveng nì'ìnglìsì san and i am departing/leaving to meet with stars sìk

Ha, lì'u alu hum lu tsa a nga namew sivar

[Tswusayona Tsamsiyu]

al of these fit in. I don't see why kä is bad. "go" is a general word for all kinds of movement from place to place, not just walking.