America: A Horse With No Name - Pa'lì luke tstxo

[Tìtstewan]

Kaltxì ma tsmuk!
I've tryed to translate America - A Horse With No Name in Na'vi.
Please let me know if you find some errors.


Pa'lì luke tstxo

Mì sìsopä hapxì a'awve
Oel narmìn fratìreyit.
Lolu ayewll ayyayosì sì ayskxe ayusì.
Lolu ayskxetsyìp sì ayramtsyìp aysangsì
Oel nì'awve ultxarun hì'angit a ngop pamit,
sì tawit a luke pìwopx.
Fko 'efu som ulte kllte lolu ukxo.
Slä ya lolu teya fa pam.

Oel ftolem txayot fa pa'li a luke tstxo,
'Efu nitram furia 'ì'awn mìso ta tompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun ziverok ngeyä tstxoti,
Kawtul a tsun skxir sivi ke tok tsatsenget.

La, la...

Maw mesrr mì letxayoa tsawke,
Oeyä ta'leng slu tun.
Maw pxesrr mì tayo a'o'.
Oel tsole'a kilvanä kllpat,
Ulte vurìl a tsal peng teri kilvan a slele,
'Eykefu oeti keftxo, talun oel fpìl futa lu kerusey

Ngal tse'a futa oel ftolem txayot fa pa'li a luke tstxo,
'Efu nitram furia 'ì'awn mìso ta tompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun ziverok ngeyä tstxoti,
kawtul a tsun skxir sivi ke tok tsatsenget

La la...

Maw volawa trr oel lolonu pa'lìti,
Taluna txayo latem ne txampay.
Fìtsenget tok ayewllìl, ayyayol, ayskxel sì ayul.
Fìtsenget tok ayskxetsyìpìl, ayramtsyìpìl sì aysangìl.
Txampay lu txayo a lu tsaru tìrey a kllteäo
Ulte lew a yo' nefä.
Srayäo klltxay txe'lan a ta kllte,
Slä sawtute ke terìng tìyawnit.

Ngal tse'a futa oel ftolem txayot fa pa'li a luke tstxo,
'Efu nitram furia 'ì'awn mìso ta tompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun ziverok ngeyä tstxoti,
kawtul a tsun skxir sivi ke tok tsatsenget

La la, la...

Spoiler: Ìnglìsì

A Horse With No Name

On the first part of the journey,
I was looking at all the life.
There were plants and birds, and rocks and things,
There was sand and hills and rings.
The first thing I met, was a fly with a buzz,
And the sky, with no clouds.
The heat was hot, and the ground was dry,
But the air was full of sound.

I've been through the desert on a horse with no name,
It felt good to be out of the rain.
In the desert you can remember your name,
Cause there ain't no one for to give you no pain.

La, la...

After two days, in the desert sun,
My skin began to turn red.
After three days, in the desert fun,
I was looking at a river bed.
And the story it told, of a river that flowed,
Made me sad to think it was dead.

You see I've been through the desert on a horse with no name,
It felt good to be out of the rain.
In the desert you can remember your name,
Cause there ain't no one for to give you no pain.

La la...

After nine days, I let the horse run free,
Cause the desert had turned to sea.
There were plants and birds, and rocks and things,
There was sand and hills and rings.
The ocean is a desert, with it's life underground,
And a perfect disguise above.
Under the cities lies, a heart made of ground,
But the humans will give no love.

You see I've been through the desert on a horse with no name,
It felt good to be out of the rain.
In the desert you can remember your name,
Cause there ain't no one for to give you no pain.

La la, la...

Spoiler: My old version

Mì sìsopä hapxì a'awve
Oel nìlmìn fraruseyit.
Lìlmu ayewll ayyayosì sì ayskxe ayusì.
Lìlmu ayskxetsyìp sì ayramtsyìp aysangsì
Oel a'awve ultxarìlmun hì'angit a hu pam,
Ulte taw a luke pìwopx.
Tìsom som lìlmu ulte kllte ukxo.
Slä ya lìlmu teya ta pam.

Oel ftolem txayot fa pa'li a luke tstxo,
'Ìlmefu nìltsan fwa 'ì'awn mìso ta tompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun ziverok ngeyä tstxoti,
Ke lu kekem fte ngar tivìng kea tìsrawit.

La, la...

Mawkrra mesrr mì tayoä tsawke,
Oeyä ta'leng sngìlmä'i tun lìyu.
Mawkrra pxesrr mì tayoä tì'o'.
Oe tsìlme'a kilvan,
Ulte vur pìlmeng, kilvan a ke fkeytok,
Oeru nìkeftxo sìlmi a fpìl tsat kxitx lìlmu.

Ngaru lìlmu oeti fa txayo mì pa'lì luke tstxo,
Tsat 'ìlmefu nìltsan ke lu mì sompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun zerok ngayä tstxo,
Fìtseng ke lu kekem fte nga tìng kea tìsraw.

La la...

Mawkrra volawa trr oel lìlmonu pa'lìti,
Txayo txampay lìlmu.
Lìlmu fìtseng ayewll ayyayosì ulte ayskxe ayusì.
Lìlmu fìtseng ayskxetsyìp ayramtsyìpsì ulte aysang.
Txampay txayo lu, hu rel äo kllpa
Ukte kea kxeyey pxenfkip.
Srayäo klltxay txe'lan lu ta 'akra,
Slä aysawtute ke new tìng tìyawn.

Ngaru lìlmu oeti fa txayo mì pa'lì luke tstxo,
Tsat 'ìlmefu nìltsan ke lu mì sompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun zerok ngayä tstxo,
Fìtseng ke lu kekem fte nga tìng kea tìsraw.

La la, la...

[Blue Elf]

Good idea, Tìtstewan! I think some corrections are needed, I put them directly into text.
(I'm not trying make text singable, it is hard job )

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

Mì sìsopä hapxì a'awve
Oel narmìn fratìreyit. (rusey is adjective; I'd prefer distant past as from the text seems to be clear that it happened longer in the past. And 'I was looking' is action in progress, so imperfective infix is good)
Lolu ayewll ayyayosì sì ayskxe ayusì. (not sure if lu would be replaced by tok)
Lolu ayskxetsyìp sì ayramtsyìp aysangsì (we have no word for ring, so...)
Oel nì'awve ultxarun hì'angit a ngop pamit,
sì tawit a luke pìwopx.
Fko 'efu som ulte kllte lolu ukxo. (I prefer not use two words based on the same root)
Slä ya lolu teya fa pam.

Oel ftolem txayot fa pa'li a luke tstxo,
'efu nitram furia 'ì'awn mìso ta tompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun ziverok ngeyä tstxoti,
kawtul a tsun skxir sivi ke tok tsatsenget (based on Czech translation I've found)

La, la...

Maw mesrr mì *letxayoa tsawke,
Oeyä ta'leng slu tun.
Maw pxesrr mì tayo a'o'.
Oel tsole'a kilvanä kllpat,
Ulte vurìl a tsal peng teri kilvan a slele, (and story it told about passing river)
'eykefu oeti keftxo, talun oel fpìl futa lu kerusey (caused me sad, because I thought it is dead)

Ngal tse'a futa oel ftolem txayot fa pa'li a luke tstxo,
'efu nitram furia 'ì'awn mìso ta tompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun ziverok ngeyä tstxoti,
kawtul a tsun skxir sivi ke tok tsatsenget

La la...

Maw volawa trr oel lolonu pa'lìti,
Taluna txayo latem ne txampay.
Fìtsenget tok ayewllìl, ayyayol, ulte ayskxel sì ayul. (Why ulte? In the same text before you used sì - what is correct)
Fìtsenget tok ayskxetsyìpìl, ayramtsyìpìl sì aysangìl.
Txampay lu txayo a lu tsaru tìrey a kllteäo
Ulte lew a yo' nefä.
Srayäo klltxay txe'lan a ta kllte,
Slä sawtute ke terìng (kea) tìyawnit.

Ngal tse'a futa oel ftolem txayot fa pa'li a luke tstxo,
'efu nitram furia 'ì'awn mìso ta tompa.
Mì tayo nga tsun ziverok ngeyä tstxoti,
kawtul a tsun skxir sivi ke tok tsatsenget

La la, la...

In general, there's no need to repeat infixes. When context is created, last infix works for following sentences, until you use another one. So for example if you use past infix first, you can omit it in the next text or simply use <ol> to indicate, that action was done.
Don't take my version as the only possible (and correct). It is hard to translate song even when not singable. Infix usage can be nearly always argued, often there is more choices.
You tried - and that is good.

[Tìtstewan]

Kaltì ma Blue Elf
First a big irayo to you for this correction! +1


Interesting, the first strophe was corrected by Plumps.

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Lolu ayskxetsyìp sì ayramtsyìp aysangsì (we have no word for ring, so...)

I know Na'vi don't have a word for rings, so I used tsang = Piercing.

kawtul a tsun skxir sivi ke tok tsatsenget (based on Czech translation I've found)

I (and Plumps too) interpreated "ain't no one for to give you no pain" as "no action that can give you pain" so I used in this sense kekem.

Fìtsenget tok ayewllìl, ayyayol[/color], ulte ayskxel sì ayul. (Why ulte? In the same text before you used sì - what is correct)

That I have to discuse. I use ulte because I understand this text not as enumeration. Plants and Birds are living thing and rocks and thinks are nonliving things.
I understand this like two conceps that are adjuncted.
I have no problem to use sì, I use ulte just in this contex as an alternative.
However, I have to talk about.


I've translate from the original English text. I don't translated this text in German, because I would prevent translating mistake (English -> German -> Na'vi can cause mistakes).

[Vawmataw]

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Nah. It is needed.

[Tirea Aean]

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Nah. It is needed.

He DID read that. On Na'viteri.

http://naviteri.org/2011/07/attributive-%E2%80%9Ca%E2%80%9D-and-truncated-style/

[Vawmataw]

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Nah. It is needed.

He DID read that. On Na'viteri.

http://naviteri.org/2011/07/attributive-%E2%80%9Ca%E2%80%9D-and-truncated-style/

Ah. I respect Karyu Pawl's speeches, but I prefer to use a, like in Pa'li a tstxoluke.

Fìtsenget tok ayewllìl, ayyayol, ayskxel sì ayul. (Why ulte? In the same text before you used sì - what is correct)

That I have to discuse. I use ulte because I understand this text not as enumeration. Plants and Birds are living thing and rocks and thinks are nonliving things.
I understand this like two conceps that are adjuncted.
I have no problem to use sì, I use ulte just in this contex as an alternative.
However, I have to talk about.

No ulte nor sì. Just a comma.

I don't think it's a great idea to seperate words about not living and living things. If the original author did it, we can translate it. If he/she didn't, it's not necessary to use ''and'' in the middle of an enumeration.

[Tirea Aean]

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Nah. It is needed.

He DID read that. On Na'viteri.

http://naviteri.org/2011/07/attributive-%E2%80%9Ca%E2%80%9D-and-truncated-style/

Ah. I respect Karyu Pawl's speeches, but I prefer to use a, like in Pa'li a tstxoluke.

Sure. But the whole point is, it is OK to leave it out if it is a title. It isn't wrong. Obviously it is OK and correct to include the a.

[Tìtstewan]

No ulte nor sì. Just a comma.

I don't think it's a great idea to seperate words about not living and living things. If the original author did it, we can translate it. If he/she didn't, it's not necessary to use ''and'' in the middle of an enumeration.

Ok, so I will use a comma or sì.

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Nah. It is needed.

He DID read that. On Na'viteri.

http://naviteri.org/2011/07/attributive-%E2%80%9Ca%E2%80%9D-and-truncated-style/

Ah. I respect Karyu Pawl's speeches, but I prefer to use a, like in Pa'li a tstxoluke.

Sure. But the whole point is, it is OK to leave it out if it is a title. It isn't wrong. Obviously it is OK and correct to include the a.

So I let it: Pa'lì luke tstxo

[Blue Elf]

Kaltì ma Blue Elf
First a big irayo to you for this correction! +1

Nìprrte'

Interesting, the first strophe was corrected by Plumps.

Well, take my version not as correction but more like alternative. It's way I'd use if I do the translation myself. But as I said - more alternatives often exists...

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Tam, forget about it. Personally I'm not using this exception

Lolu ayskxetsyìp sì ayramtsyìp aysangsì (we have no word for ring, so...)

I know Na'vi don't have a word for rings, so I used tsang = Piercing.

I knew I'm missing something

Fìtsenget tok ayewllìl, ayyayol[/color], ulte ayskxel sì ayul. (Why ulte? In the same text before you used sì - what is correct)

That I have to discuse. I use ulte because I understand this text not as enumeration. Plants and Birds are living thing and rocks and thinks are nonliving things.
I understand this like two conceps that are adjuncted.
I have no problem to use sì, I use ulte just in this contex as an alternative.
However, I have to talk about.

Ulte connects sentences; sentence contains verb. So if there no verb, I don't see reason to use ulte.... But, of course, in poetry/song texts some irregularities are allowed.

[Tìtstewan]

Kaltì ma Blue Elf
First a big irayo to you for this correction! +1

Nìprrte'

Kea tìkin

Interesting, the first strophe was corrected by Plumps.

Well, take my version not as correction but more like alternative. It's way I'd use if I do the translation myself. But as I said - more alternatives often exists...

Yes, that I know.

Pa'lì a luke tstxo (a here is needed; you even used it later in the text )

If you use this as title, I think it be ok without "a". (that I read somewhere)

Tam, forget about it. Personally I'm not using this exception

I think: Excepions are there to use it.

Lolu ayskxetsyìp sì ayramtsyìp aysangsì (we have no word for ring, so...)

I know Na'vi don't have a word for rings, so I used tsang = Piercing.

I knew I'm missing something

...desert or sand was missing too. lol
That's cause burning brains.

Fìtsenget tok ayewllìl, ayyayol[/color], ulte ayskxel sì ayul. (Why ulte? In the same text before you used sì - what is correct)

That I have to discuse. I use ulte because I understand this text not as enumeration. Plants and Birds are living thing and rocks and thinks are nonliving things.
I understand this like two conceps that are adjuncted.
I have no problem to use sì, I use ulte just in this contex as an alternative.
However, I have to talk about.

Ulte connects sentences; sentence contains verb. So if there no verb, I don't see reason to use ulte.... But, of course, in poetry/song texts some irregularities are allowed.

However, I thank you!