Home on the Range for Karyu Pawl

[Kamean]

Kosman

[Tirea Aean]

Taronyu, I dont think you understood the way the na'vi fits the melody the same way as the person who wrote it.

Ftiafpi, he sped up because he held some out too long. Here is waht I get out of it:

Tìng   oe - ru    kel - kut.
  O    give  me   a    home

Tseng  a   eyk - tan oe  lu.
Where the buff - a  - lo roam

Tseng  a    ay - ye - rìk ti  -  vul   nì  - win.         (even tho the stress of ayyerik is on YE)
Where the deer and the an -  te  - lope  play

Kaw    krr    ngal  ke stawm ay - lì   - 'u   - ti     a - kawng.   (added -ti instead of t on lì'ut)
Where sel - dom  is  heard   a    dis - cou - ra - ging word

Ul - te   taw  la - yu  e   -  an  fra - trr.
and the skies are not clou - dy  all   day

Chorus
Kel  -  ku     mì  ta - yo.
Home, home on  the  range

Tseng  a    ay - ye - rìk ti  -  vul   nì  - win.         (even tho the stress of ayyerik is on YE)
Where the deer and the an -  te  - lope  play

Kaw    krr    ngal  ke stawm ay - lì   - 'u   - ti     a - kawng.   (added -ti instead of t on lì'ut)
Where sel - dom  is  heard   a    dis - cou - ra - ging word

Ul - te   taw  la - yu  e   -  an  fra - trr.
and the skies are not clou - dy  all   day


Txon a  krr oe heyn.
How of-ten at night

Teng - krr       txan - a   -  tan    lu   taw. (teng is a {VERY FAST} pickup note, the line would start with krr)
          Where  the     hea - vens are bright

Ta    san - hì     sì    Ey - wa - yä   a - tan.  (ta, again a very fast pickup note)
       With the    light of   glit - te - ring starts

O  -  e  kll  -   kxem  ul - te
Have I  stood  there  a - mazed


so on and so on, so on. \dont have time for this

[eejmensenikbenhet]

[...]

So, what did you think of my version? Since I've tried to stick to the syllables in the original while writing the first stanza and the chorus and since I kept that idea going while singing it. I'm just curious you know...

[Ftiafpi]

Taronyu, I dont think you understood the way the na'vi fits the melody the same way as the person who wrote it.

Ftiafpi, he sped up because he held some out too long. Here is waht I get out of it:

Tìng   oe - ru    kel - kut.
  O    give  me   a    home

Tseng  a   eyk - tan oe  lu.
Where the buff - a  - lo roam

Tseng  a    ay - ye - rìk ti  -  vul   nì  - win.         (even tho the stress of ayyerik is on YE)
Where the deer and the an -  te  - lope  play

Kaw    krr    ngal  ke stawm ay - lì   - 'u   - ti     a - kawng.   (added -ti instead of t on lì'ut)
Where sel - dom  is  heard   a    dis - cou - ra - ging word

Ul - te   taw  la - yu  e   -  an  fra - trr.
and the skies are not clou - dy  all   day

Chorus
Kel  -  ku     mì  ta - yo.
Home, home on  the  range

Tseng  a    ay - ye - rìk ti  -  vul   nì  - win.         (even tho the stress of ayyerik is on YE)
Where the deer and the an -  te  - lope  play

Kaw    krr    ngal  ke stawm ay - lì   - 'u   - ti     a - kawng.   (added -ti instead of t on lì'ut)
Where sel - dom  is  heard   a    dis - cou - ra - ging word

Ul - te   taw  la - yu  e   -  an  fra - trr.
and the skies are not clou - dy  all   day


Txon a  krr oe heyn.
How of-ten at night

Teng - krr       txan - a   -  tan    lu   taw. (teng is a {VERY FAST} pickup note, the line would start with krr)
          Where  the     hea - vens are bright

Ta    san - hì     sì    Ey - wa - yä   a - tan.  (ta, again a very fast pickup note)
       With the    light of   glit - te - ring starts

O  -  e  kll  -   kxem  ul - te
Have I  stood  there  a - mazed


so on and so on, so on. \dont have time for this

Sweet, I took your suggestion of changing "-t" to "-ti". Reading through it though I still am not happy with some of the locations of the trilled rr's and it seems that there's still a bit more work to do. If anyone has suggestions for ways to improve the lyrics I'm all mikyun.

[Blue Elf]

A YouTube attempt then, please bear with the noise, that's the cooler of my laptop. I couldn't find the mic so I had to use the inbuilt one. Just to be clear: I'm singing the version with my suggestions in it. First post on this page.

Ohh, I completely missed this thread, damn!
Ma eejmensenikbenhet, your singing is great, I like it!

I found some minor mistakes in first post (sorry for nitpicking):
Tseng a yerik tivul nìwin. (not accented i should be there)
fì'uìl tok tsengti kop srak? (agentive case of fì'u is fì'ul)

Really good job, you all did it well!

[Ftiafpi]

A YouTube attempt then, please bear with the noise, that's the cooler of my laptop. I couldn't find the mic so I had to use the inbuilt one. Just to be clear: I'm singing the version with my suggestions in it. First post on this page.

Ohh, I completely missed this thread, damn!
Ma eejmensenikbenhet, your singing is great, I like it!

I found some minor mistakes in first post (sorry for nitpicking):
Tseng a yerik tivul nìwin. (not accented i should be there)
fì'uìl tok tsengti kop srak? (agentive case of fì'u is fì'ul)

Really good job, you all did it well!

Thanks a bunch, I fixed the errors you found.

[eejmensenikbenhet]

So, tried the current version and there were still a few things I saw:

(The 'tx' in the title of the song still hasn't lenited. )
Then I miss one syllable in the third verse "Tseng a yerik tivul nìwin." I'm voting for the return of "ay-yerik"
And a little later, the last verse of the second stanze misses 2 syllables.
Third, just my opinion: I would change "mì awngey fìtsenge" into "mì awngeyä fìtseng"

[Ftiafpi]

So, tried the current version and there were still a few things I saw:

(The 'tx' in the title of the song still hasn't lenited. )
Then I miss one syllable in the third verse "Tseng a yerik tivul nìwin." I'm voting for the return of "ay-yerik"
And a little later, the last verse of the second stanze misses 2 syllables.
Third, just my opinion: I would change "mì awngey fìtsenge" into "mì awngeyä fìtseng"

1) Nobody expects the lenition! FIXED
2) Sounds good.
3) Really, seems like its only one short to me and the rolled rr could almost count for 2 in terms of timing. Do you have any suggestions?
4) I'm going to keep it as is so that yawne and fìtsenge share the same ending vowel (if you can come up with a good rhyme it would be awesome).

[eejmensenikbenhet]

So, tried the current version and there were still a few things I saw:

(The 'tx' in the title of the song still hasn't lenited. )
Then I miss one syllable in the third verse "Tseng a yerik tivul nìwin." I'm voting for the return of "ay-yerik"
And a little later, the last verse of the second stanze misses 2 syllables.
Third, just my opinion: I would change "mì awngey fìtsenge" into "mì awngeyä fìtseng"

1) Nobody expects the lenition! FIXED
2) Sounds good.
3) Really, seems like its only one short to me and the rolled rr could almost count for 2 in terms of timing. Do you have any suggestions?
4) I'm going to keep it as is so that yawne and fìtsenge share the same ending vowel (if you can come up with a good rhyme it would be awesome).

3) There's no rolled rr in the part I mean... I mean this: "fì'ul tok tsengti kop srak?" Maybe "Srake fì'ul tok tsengeti kop?" adds two "-e"s.
4) This was only a suggestion, if you want to leave the rhyme, what you have now is the best option.

[Ftiafpi]

So, tried the current version and there were still a few things I saw:

(The 'tx' in the title of the song still hasn't lenited. )
Then I miss one syllable in the third verse "Tseng a yerik tivul nìwin." I'm voting for the return of "ay-yerik"
And a little later, the last verse of the second stanze misses 2 syllables.
Third, just my opinion: I would change "mì awngey fìtsenge" into "mì awngeyä fìtseng"

1) Nobody expects the lenition! FIXED
2) Sounds good.
3) Really, seems like its only one short to me and the rolled rr could almost count for 2 in terms of timing. Do you have any suggestions?
4) I'm going to keep it as is so that yawne and fìtsenge share the same ending vowel (if you can come up with a good rhyme it would be awesome).

3) There's no rolled rr in the part I mean... I mean this: "fì'ul tok tsengti kop srak?" Maybe "Srake fì'ul tok tsengeti kop?" adds two "-e"s.
4) This was only a suggestion, if you want to leave the rhyme, what you have now is the best option.

Done.

[hemmond]

I took a guitar and tried to play it... And I have to say, It's singable. And pretty nice.

[Ftiafpi]

I took a guitar and tried to play it... And I have to say, It's singable. And pretty nice.

Did you have any parts that gave you trouble or didn't sound quite right?

[hemmond]

I need to get used to layu/livu. In thje first verse you have livu, but in chorus you have layu... But the rest of the sentence remains same. I've first recording... not exactly great quality and I sometimes forgotten which chord is next, but as preview it's enough... Exporting to mp3... But it's really "working version"... It's not the final version. Better version will be after Christmas, when I'll have better equipment and more practicing of this song. This version I've recorded without any preparations. So i want to hear read your feedback. Write here everything you want to improve...

[Ftiafpi]

Oh, thanks for catching that discrepancy, it should be livu. I listened to your sample recording and it sounds pretty good. The tempo seemed a little fast and the guitar obviously overpowered the lyrics a bit but it was very enjoyable to listen to. I'd say just slow the tempo down a bit and it should be great.

[Blue Elf]

Yes, I must agree. With slower tempo all will Ok, it sounds well.

[Tirea Aean]

will listen asap.

[eejmensenikbenhet]

I created a music sheet for Kelku mì Tayo. If you see any mistakes in the lyrics, please tell me so I can change it or otherwise people may learn the lyrics wrong.



EDIT: I also have recorded a new sample, I will be uploading that to YouTube tomorrow.

[Ftiafpi]

I created a music sheet for Kelku mì Tayo. If you see any mistakes in the lyrics, please tell me so I can change it or otherwise people may learn the lyrics wrong.



EDIT: I also have recorded a new sample, I will be uploading that to YouTube tomorrow.

Sweet! Looks amazing and I didn't see any errors in a quick read-through. I anxiously await the YouTube sample.

[Kamean]

Great work.

[Tirea Aean]

A new sample (recorded with the new mic I got for Christmas) is being uploaded to YouTube as I'm typing this. Will edit this post when done.

Will watch upon availability of link.