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Offline Nawmway te Ramsute Txayo'ite

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Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« on: March 04, 2011, 11:27:21 pm »
This is my first big project involving Na'vi!  I love Rammstein, and love the Du Hast translation, so I decided to make my own with my favorite Rammstein song.

I'm aware that the translation is off in places, but I was going for rhythm and rhyme more than anything, and those fluent in the language will probably get the basic idea.


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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #1 on: March 05, 2011, 11:14:41 am »
Ahh I know this song :) not sure if I can sing your translation... some parts were... strange to me... but first we got to get it into correct na'vi ;)
nice work anyway :) I want you to sing the song when the translationwork is done ;)

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Syulangit tsame'a 'evel
Poel new tsat nìseykxel
Polawm pol yawnetutr poeyä
Txo tsat poaniìl munge kayä

Poel new tsat, ulte nìltsan lu
Tsaw fìfya lu, frakrr fìfya layu
Poel new tsat, lu fya krrä
Fra'ut pol new, slu poeyä

Oe zene tivaron ngimkrr txana krr
Txo txana smarit oel new
Lora syulang, oh, lora syulang
Poan zene livu txan tstew

sorry got not more time now...

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #2 on: March 05, 2011, 12:36:53 pm »
Oh wow, the final product is definitely going to be epic! :) I also like Rammstein very much. :D

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #3 on: March 05, 2011, 02:01:51 pm »
Regarding fya krrä, I couldn't find a word for tradition or custom, so I went with "time's way".

And thank you for your help!  I'll get on fixing some things.

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #4 on: March 05, 2011, 04:02:36 pm »
"the way" is "fya'o" ;)

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #5 on: March 05, 2011, 10:33:42 pm »
Irayo Talis!  I've made a pre-draft of the song just so I can show you how I'd like it sung as far as beat goes. 

(BTW, the "Pol keran'ìn lu sat syulang" is intentionally incorrect, as if I put "syulangit" I wouldn't be able to rhyme it.)

Lora Syulang.mp3

I had to make the song higher for my voice, as I'm female and my voice may be deep, but it can't go that low.

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #6 on: March 06, 2011, 05:02:42 am »
I'm male and can't go down that deep like Till Lindemann ;)

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Poan kä nefä tsawla ram
Pol keran'ìn lu sat syulangit
Po new tsilve'a 'eveti
(a) nitram lu, ha pol tsat munge

Poel new tsat, ulte nìltsan lu
Tsaw fìfya lu, frakrr fìfya layu
Poel new tsat, lu fya'o krrä
Fra'ut pol new, slu poeyä

Oe zene tivaron ngimkrr txana krr
Txo txana smarit oel new
Lora syulang, oh, lora syulang
Poan zene livu txan tstew

Tskxe zup tengkrr po kerä nefä
Po ke lirvu new fitsenge
Ulte zawng tung frapo omum ->ulte tìzusawng oeyktìng fraporu
Mefo'evan sì syulang zerup ne kllte lu

sorry got not more time now. oh and it isn't singable in this corrected form, I think you have to work at some parts again do regain that.

ah and by the way: don't forget the ejectives and Glottalstops when you're singing this ;) rest sounded fine to me :) keep on! :)
« Last Edit: March 10, 2011, 09:49:48 am by Talis »

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #7 on: March 06, 2011, 05:11:19 am »
Nang fì'u oer sunu nìtxan!
Wow I really like this!
Krro krro pamrel seri fìtsengmì, alu oey pìlok leNa'vi
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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #8 on: March 06, 2011, 07:06:41 pm »
ah and by the way: don't forget the ejectives and Glottalstops when you're singing this ;) rest sounded fine to me :) keep on! :)

Although the gentler the singing, the more likely those four consonants are likely to be lenited (at least a little), so that the song flows a little better.

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #9 on: March 06, 2011, 11:49:55 pm »
take the beautiful ejectives away just because of the flow? ... no!  :o :'(
especially by Rammstein it should be ok to sing them in full strength ;D

of course some times it sound strange - but this is Na'vi, I think we shouldn't adapt it just it because it don't "flow" enough in our human ears, maybe the Na'vi would think about that completely different. ;)

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #10 on: March 15, 2011, 11:45:41 am »
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Last stanzas are just repetition so they're  same as the other corrected versions


so now you just got to record a new, corrected version - if it's possible to sing this corrected version ;)

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Re: Lora Syulang (Rosenrot niNa'vi)
« Reply #11 on: May 03, 2011, 03:47:58 pm »
Really good ! Although meaning and grammar suffer by mistakes :), it sounds well with rhymes!!
Have you new version recorded? I agree with Talis - ejectives must be sung correctly, othervise many of the Na'vi magic is lost...
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