Sound Life (Rem's song from Trigun) translated into Na'vi

[judytuna]

I just saw Trigun for the first time last month. I was wholly captivated.

There is a song with a haunting melody that figures strongly in the main character's memories. Here is a studio version of the song, from the first Trigun soundtrack.
TRIGUN-Sound life-Rem

Here are the lyrics in japanese and someone's translation to english.
http://www.animelyrics.com/anime/trigun/trisl.htm

I do not know any japanese, so I am completely relying on this english translation.

Warning: my grammar is horrible. Please help me!!!

Original / Romaji Lyrics from animelyrics	English Translation from animelyrics	Na'vi attempt by me
So...   hitotsu-me no yoru ni izuko kara koishi ga sekai ni ochiru	So...   On the first night, a pebble falls to the earth from somewhere.	So...  mì awve-a txon, on first-ADJ night tskxetsyìp zup ne kllte ftu tsengo rock/stone-DIMINUTIVE falls onto ground from somewhere A little rock falls on the ground from somewhere.
So...    futatsu-me no yoru ni koishi no ko ga te wo tori WARUTSU wo kaku Sound life	So...   On the second night, The pebble's children hold hands and sketch a waltz. Sound life	So... mì muve-a txon, on second-ADJ night tskxetsyìp-yä eveng-ìl 'awstengyem syokx-it ulte srew rock-DIMINUTIVE-GEN PLURAL+child-ERG join(two things together) PLURAL+hand-PAT and dance ("and dance" is dubious; may have to do more grammar shenanigans?) The little rock's children join hands and dance. (can I use "make a dance" with si somehow?) Sound life
So...   mitsu-me no yoru ni WARUTSU no ko wa yonamo ni UE-BU wo utsu	So...   On the third night, The children of the waltz cause ripples on the face of the world	So... mì pxeyve-a txon on third-ADJ night tì-srew-yä eveng-ìl r<eyk>ikx kifkey-ä key-t [noun deriving affix]-dance-GEN PLURAL+child-ERG move<causative> world-GEN face-PAT the dance's children cause the world's face to move (to be moved?). I'm ditching "causing ripples on the world" for the simpler "cause the world to move."
So...   yotsu-me no yoru ni nami no ko wa kishibe ni shibuki wo ageru Sound life	So...   On the fourth night, the children of the wave spray the shore. Sound life	So... mì tsìve txon, on fourth night tì-rikx-ä eveng-il spä sìn txampay-ä pxawpa-ti [noun deriving affix]-move PLURAL+child-ERG onto ocean-GEN border-PAT The movement's children jump onto the ocean's perimeter. Sound life
So...   itsutsu-me no yoru ni sono kakera ikudomo yonamo wo tataku	So...   On the fifth night, those shards strike the face of the earth over and over.	So... mì mrrve-a txon on fifth-ADJ night tsay+swizaw-il takuk kifkey-ä key-t nìmun nìmun sì those+arrow-ERG strike world's face-PAT again and again
So...   mutsu-me no yoru ni sono aizu ni tabibito wa tsudoiau Sound life	So...   On the sixth night, those signals bring travellers together. Sound life	So... mì puve-a txon on sixth-ADJ night tsay+sä-tse'a-l starsìm 'awsiteng ay+sopyu-ti those-sight-ERG gather together plural-traveller-PAT Sound life
So...   nanatsu-me no yoru ni omosa no nai fune wa sora e to hashiru	So...   On the seventh night, a weightless ship races to the sky.	So... mì kive-a txon on seventh-ADJ night syo light
So...   yatsu-me no asa ni izuko kara no uta ga mimi e to todoku Sound life	So...   On the eighth morning, a song from somewhere reaches my ears. Sound life	So... mì volve-a rewon, while eighth-ADJ morning Sound life
saa...   atarashii sora ni subete wo shirushita kumikyoku ga hibiku Sound life Sound life	Well then...   A song that has recorded everything echoes to the new sky. Sound life Sound life	ha... tìrol so... song Sound life Sound life

Notes:

- I have kept the "So...." and the "Sound Life" in English, because they are in English in the original Japanese song.
- This is a perfect song to be translated into Na'vi because it counts up to eight (thereby aiding in the teaching of the numbers), and because the Na'vi have an octal number system.
- Also it is about ships in the sky and starting a new life on a faraway planet and cause and effect and sadness and longing and beauty and songs.
- Thank you entity on irc for helping at 7:22am 5/4. haha
- scraps:  na key-ti