Avatar fan film- International project

[Ftiafpi]

Project 770 ftw! Excellent name. I skimmed through it and it looks good, this is kind of what I pictured for how the fan film would work. It seems to lack an ending though, it kind of just abruptly ends.

[Kerame Pxel Nume]

Project 770 ftw! Excellent name. I skimmed through it and it looks good, this is kind of what I pictured for how the fan film would work. It seems to lack an ending though, it kind of just abruptly ends.

It's just the expose. Only the start of the whole thing. Just to give a glimpse what comes

Spoiler

MARK befriended a fellow pilot, VIOLETTA though she's military. She was at the SLAN site. On the trip back from the SLAN VIOLETTAs Samson gets attacked by the Leonopteryx which they saw on their trip to the site. The Samson is severly damaged, but she can  escape using the ejection seat. While on the parachute, she gets attacked again, looses the primary. One of the military guys in MARKs havy lifter fires his machine gun at the Leonopteryx which then let go of VIOLETTA, which can safely land using the reserve chute.

However she must see, how now it's MARK who's attacked. In a severe air battle finally Leonopteryx wins and MARK's heavy lifter goes down. A few klicks in the opposite direction, than VIOLETTA is ordered to go for her rescue lift some clearing in the forrest or so). She gets explicit order to go for her own rescue, not bother about MARK.

MARK awakes high atop the ground in the tree's foilage, his cockpit has been ripped of the fuselage. Basically he's on his own. After he reached the ground he collect's what he thinks will be most usefull (and that's not guns). He only grabs a small handgun. After all he's a civilian.

So we've got _two_ protagonists, MARK and VIOLETTA, who both have to work their way through Pandora jungle. Eventually MARK bumps into a Na'vi clan, who are quite curious. Eeither side only knows little of the foreign vocabulary, but they manage to understand each other, and they go help MARK getting back to base.

VIOLETTA on the other hand finds out, that she is carrying one of the single most important discoveries of SLAN. A small specimen of Na'vi nervous tissue, genetically crossed with human properties. In fact it's one of the cornerstones of the later Avatar program. However this small specimen has been concieved to a very high price, and if they details would come out, it would mean a major conflict between Na'vi and humans, a lot earlier than the events we've seen so far.

However it is MARK who accidently trips over it: He finds out, that the RDA captured a small group of Na'vi and performed all sorts of cruel experiments on them. At that time he already became a very good friend with the Na'vi. So this is something almost personal to him. This knowledge is a too big liability, so he gets on the RDA's kill list. Earth is not yet depending on unobtainium so they are in risk of being cut of.

He, VIOLETTA and a few of the Na'vi try to send a message back to earth in the hope, the activist resistance will get it, but ultimately they fail. MARK gets killed by the RDA before the transmission, but just before his death takes a promise from the Na'vi and VIOLETTA that they somehow must manage to send this information, together with a electronic log he did back to earth. At least he wants his family to know, what he died for. VIOLETTA and the Na'vi manage to escape the RDA, and it is clear that VIOLETTA will then stay with them.

Well, that's the basic outline

[Ikranä mokri]

this has gone from a could be worked on to a this has a good story basis character development could be nice, although if i was directing (which if this goes ahead im not, i prefer to act) i would wanna go thorugh and do minor changes to certain little bits, but thats me being a writer and wanting someone elses good work to be my own soz

[Kerame Pxel Nume]

this has gone from a could be worked on to a this has a good story basis character development could be nice, although if i was directing (which if this goes ahead im not, i prefer to act) i would wanna go thorugh and do minor changes to certain little bits, but thats me being a writer and wanting someone elses good work to be my own soz

Yes, I know what you mean. That was a synopsis, of what I had written. However I don't like that VIOLETTA basically is another TRUDY, only that she survives. This requires a major overhaul.

The main focus should not be on MARK befriending the Na'vi clan, this should take only a few minutes of screen time. The whole Leonopteryx incident is to put him into contact - but IMHO this is just too much Palulukan. However I don't want to have another engine failure, we had this already back on earth, to bring MARK to Pandora. But I'd as happy to be him just some kind of adventurer in for the hardship, but that would then be just like Jake, who goes there for the hardship. Also then the whole family issue doesn't work - which I wanted to use in a scene, when he is with the Na'vi, showing around the photo, and the clan realizes, that he has been separated from them by force, and that his daughter is ill from a severely contaminated earth.

There's still a lot of space in the 2rd act. 1st act is, how contact is made to the Na'vi. In act 2 is how MARK discovers the, well not secret but for him off limits lab, where he finds the shocking evidence. Due to his connections to some Na'vi he became somewhat like am ambassador from earth, even some Na'vi being guests in the human base (remember that the premis is, that humans just arrived). For a fan movie project a lot of human interaction makes things much easier.

I also don't want MARK to impair his mutual trust with the Na'vi, so after the climax of act 2 his first contact with the Na'vi is in act 3 where he immediately tells them about his findings. Thereafter it's only about survival and getting the information sent to earth, which means infiltrating Hell's Gate.

We already know, that in 2154 there is an established activist-resistance, what we get to see is its very beginnings.

[Ikranä mokri]

The main focus should not be on MARK befriending the Na'vi clan, this should take only a few minutes of screen time. The whole Leonopteryx incident is to put him into contact - but IMHO this is just too much Palulukan. However I don't want to have another engine failure, we had this already back on earth, to bring MARK to Pandora. But I'd as happy to be him just some kind of adventurer in for the hardship, but that would then be just like Jake, who goes there for the hardship. Also then the whole family issue doesn't work - which I wanted to use in a scene, when he is with the Na'vi, showing around the photo, and the clan realizes, that he has been separated from them by force, and that his daughter is ill from a severely contaminated earth.

with the whole engine failure business, i was thinking something a little more extreme, but it requires a change of setting and slight story change. but i, to tired to think about stories right now sorry, please PM with anything you want or on here and i will reply when i get up tomorow