Na'vi Valentine's Day! (Please help spread the word!)

[Kaltxì Palulukan!]

Here's a beginner submission (I know that my grammar is atrocious) :

Oeyä 'upxare law lu
Atan ngeyäta menari sevin lu
'Awsiteng, oeng 'ong
Oeyä txe'lan na au

Translation:

My message is clear
The light from your eyes is beautiful
Together, we blossom
My heart is like a drum

Oh, I am stealing that. Gots' me a date this Friday! Of course I will be taking credit for my romantic "skillz."

[Atan Aylaru]

Here's a beginner submission (I know that my grammar is atrocious) :

Oeyä 'upxare law lu
Atan ngeyäta menari sevin lu
'Awsiteng, oeng 'ong
Oeyä txe'lan na au

Translation:

My message is clear
The light from your eyes is beautiful
Together, we blossom
My heart is like a drum

Oh, I am stealing that. Gots' me a date this Friday! Of course I will be taking credit for my romantic "skillz."

Glad I could help with your love life

[Atanä mungeyu]

gonna make one atm, but i probably wont win though xD..
awesome idea though, making a na'vi valentine card, though i have no one to give it to...
eywa ayngahu,
atanä mungeyu

[Atanä mungeyu]

darn i've been trying for around 30 mins now, but i can't create an english one and then translate it without being lame...
i can barely get inspiration, it sucks...
do you have ot make it your own, or can you also just translate one?
eywa aygnahu,
atanä mungeyu

[Nyx]

And a second for the grammar nazi category is a rough translation of the Shakespeare's shall I compare thee to a summer's day:

Nga na trr leprrte' lu srak?
Nga nulmawey sì nulpxan lu,
Txura hufwe fratrr rikx,
Ulte sìltsana trr 'ì'awn 'itkrr
Krr tsawke nìhawng som lu,
Ulte peyä atan kätul,
Frasevintu tìsevinta kä,
Fpi tìftxey eywayä,
slä trr ngeyä kawkrr ke tayul
kefu ngeyä tìlor tut,
kefu nga terkuptuhu ke rayan
mì na'rìng lefrakrr a krr nga 'ong,
txo sute rey fu aynari tse'a
faylì'u rey ulte ngar tìrey ting.

Dude, that's one of my all time favourites, and now it's in Na'vi. You rock!

[kewnya txamew'itan]

darn i've been trying for around 30 mins now, but i can't create an english one and then translate it without being lame...
i can barely get inspiration, it sucks...
do you have ot make it your own, or can you also just translate one?
eywa aygnahu,
atanä mungeyu

I think it's OKish to translate some provided you credit the original poet. For example, my main entry atm is a translation of one of Shakepseare's sonnets.

[snip]

Dude, that's one of my all time favourites, and now it's in Na'vi. You rock!

I picked a sonnet I knew vaguely well (albeit only from English lessons) and its was this or let me not and I preferred this one too.

[Txur’Itan]

darn i've been trying for around 30 mins now, but i can't create an english one and then translate it without being lame...
i can barely get inspiration, it sucks...
do you have ot make it your own, or can you also just translate one?
eywa aygnahu,
atanä mungeyu

I think it's OKish to translate some provided you credit the original poet. For example, my main entry atm is a translation of one of Shakepseare's sonnets.

[snip]

Dude, that's one of my all time favourites, and now it's in Na'vi. You rock!

I picked a sonnet I knew vaguely well (albeit only from English lessons) and its was this or let me not and I preferred this one too.

I just wrote something off of the top of my own head. 

I suppose it is more interesting to translate poems and stories people already know.

[Taronyu Ayunilyä Alahe]

gonna make one atm, but i probably wont win though xD..
awesome idea though, making a na'vi valentine card, though i have no one to give it to...
eywa ayngahu,
atanä mungeyu

you can always give it to your sister or mom

I'm making something atm but I dunno if it'll be the correct grammar... hmphh,, are we allowed to have it checked by someone else? it would mean the project isn't purely ours tho... hmm

[Kaltxì Palulukan!]

darn i've been trying for around 30 mins now, but i can't create an english one and then translate it without being lame...
i can barely get inspiration, it sucks...
do you have ot make it your own, or can you also just translate one?
eywa aygnahu,
atanä mungeyu

The idea is to have fun and embarrass yourself by writing bad poetry (see MY bad poetry in an earlier post!). You see, even after Valentine's day, there is Mother's day, Flag Day, Groundhog Day. And who doesn't have a birthday? Ting is having a birthday on the 15th. If you need inspiration, why not make HER a Valentine's themed birthday card (in Na'vi)? Of course, don't tell her I said so, or that i was too lazy to open up Star Office (freeware MS Word clone) to grab that fancy "i" she uses in hr name.

[Atanä mungeyu]

darn i've been trying for around 30 mins now, but i can't create an english one and then translate it without being lame...
i can barely get inspiration, it sucks...
do you have ot make it your own, or can you also just translate one?
eywa aygnahu,
atanä mungeyu

The idea is to have fun and embarrass yourself by writing bad poetry (see MY bad poetry in an earlier post!). You see, even after Valentine's day, there is Mother's day, Flag Day, Groundhog Day. And who doesn't have a birthday? Ting is having a birthday on the 15th. If you need inspiration, why not make HER a Valentine's themed birthday card (in Na'vi)? Of course, don't tell her I said so, or that i was too lazy to open up Star Office (freeware MS Word clone) to grab that fancy "i" she uses in hr name.

lold, but i have no idea who Ting is..
lold i live in holland so i have no idea what flag day is, and i've only heard of groundhog day xD
but my problem is, i can't even create a bad English poem..., so i think i'm not gonna enter this... 

[carriesloa]

Great idea!

Okay, I can't win a prize because I got this translation direct from Paul Frommer. (We interviewed him for the website I run: www.lemondrop.com/2010/01/26/avatar-pick-up-lines-talk-dirty-in-Navi), and then, just today, posted our Na'vi Valentine we created.

but some of yours look awesome, too. feel free to come check ours out, and share yours here:

http://www.lemondrop.com/2010/02/11/nerd-love-navi-elvish-or-klingon-valentine-e-card/

[Kaltxì Palulukan!]

Great idea!

Okay, I can't win a prize because I got this translation direct from Paul Frommer. (We interviewed him for the website I run: www.lemondrop.com/2010/01/26/avatar-pick-up-lines-talk-dirty-in-Navi), and then, just today, posted our Na'vi Valentine we created.

but some of yours look awesome, too. feel free to come check ours out, and share yours here:

http://www.lemondrop.com/2010/02/11/nerd-love-navi-elvish-or-klingon-valentine-e-card/

I read the interview (for the first time--oops! I have been a bit buried in Na'vi work), and I love the Na'vi Valentine's Card!

[MarioO]

category: absolutely noobs.

Oel ngati kameie. Oeyä tìyawn lu txur pxel palulukan. Ke'u tsun ska'a oeyä tìyawn ngahu.

A really bad, non poetic kind of a poem

[Atanä mungeyu]

BTW 1 question: can you also make one as a team, 'cause i'm making one with Taronyu Ayunilyä Alahe, she makes the poem, i translate it
is that illegal here, or can we just post it and enter as a team?
eywa ayngahu,
atanä mungeyu

[Ataeghane]

Category: not a newbie, not an expert... so... everyone else ?

OK, here's my translation of a little poem:

Trrmì Välentaynä aSwok,
Ke'u akawng ke tsun tivok.
Zene lrrtok sivi frapo fìtrr,
Taluna fìtrr lu tìyawnä krr.
Mipa sì'eylanit nìftxavang ngop,
Slä nari si yola ayfkoru kop,
Taweyka ayfko amip Pxorna lu,
Ulte ayfko ayol lu Mauti Utu.

That means (or at least I wanted it to mean ):
In the Saint Valentine's Day,
Any evil cannot exist.
Everyone should be smiled,
Because today is the time of love.
Make new friends,
But care about old ones,
Because new ones are Pxorna,
And old ones are Utu Mauti.

By "Pxorna" i ment something like "silver", and by "Utu Mauti" - "gold". As we know, Pxorna is important for Na'vi, but Utu Mauti is their real delicacy. ("Because new ones are silver, and old ones are gold.")

PS. Oh, I can see that there is not many people with rhymes in their poems .

[Kaltxì Palulukan!]

BTW 1 question: can you also make one as a team, 'cause i'm making one with Taronyu Ayunilyä Alahe, she makes the poem, i translate it
is that illegal here, or can we just post it and enter as a team?
eywa ayngahu,
atanä mungeyu

of course you can! You will just have to share the (completely worthless) prize--if you win. but half the fun is writing bad poetry!

[Kaltxì Palulukan!]

category: absolutely noobs.

Oel ngati kameie. Oeyä tìyawn lu txur pxel palulukan. Ke'u tsun ska'a oeyä tìyawn ngahu.

A really bad, non poetic kind of a poem

Bonus points for working in Thanator! Kaltxì Palulukn approves!

[Ftiafpi]

EXPERT (grammar nazi) entry:
(it rhymes too )

Oeyä txe'lan

Oeyä txe'lan nerekx fa txan atan
Pxel oeru ngal tìran

Oeyä tìyawn lu pxel txep
Ulte oeyä ronsem lu pxel vrrtep

Mefo tsam serängi
Slä tsakrr ngal 'ampi oeyä meseyriti

Fa fìkem ftxavanga keye'ung
'Ekong ta oeyä txe'lan lu nì'aw toleiung


Translation:

Oeyä txe'lan
1-GEN heart
My heart

Oeyä txe'lan nerekx fa txan atan
1-GEN heart burn-IMP with much light
My heart burns bright

Pxel oeru ngal tìran
As me-DAT you walk
As you walk to me

Oeyä tìyawn lu pxel txep
1-GEN love be like fire
My love is like a fire

Ulte oeyä ronsem lu pxel vrrtep
And 1-GEN mind be like demon
And my mind is like a demon

Mefo tsam serängi
2-DUAL war make-IMP-PEJ
Unfortunately, they are at war

Slä tsakrr ngal 'ampi oeyä meseyriti
But that-time 2-ERG touch 1-GEN lip-DUAL-ACC
But when you kiss my lips

Fa fìkem ftxavanga keye'ung
With this(action) passionate-ADJ insanity
With such passionate insanity

'Ekong ta oeyä txe'lan lu nì'aw toleiung
Beat from 1-GEN heart be only allow-PER-LAUD
Only is my heart allowed to beat

Feel free to send this to any girlfriends/boyfriends you might have.

[Fpeioyuyä 'ite]

All right, I'm sick of looking at this poem, so I'm submitting it as-is.  Let's get this show on the road! (Category: Everyone else)
Written for my lovely boyfriend, Nick.

Ma Nìklles,

Ngeyä ronsem atxur lu, ulte nga asevin lu
(Slä pxim ngeyä ayhemit oel ke tslängam)
Oe lrrtok si taluna nga plltxe oehu
Ngeyä mokri na tìrol lu
Oe hìyìk 'efu ìlä tsakrr oe ngahu lu
Slä oe fpìl futa nga yawne lu oeru
Ulte fìkrr Tìyawn-Krr lu
Tafral, oel ngati pawm...
Yawne kop oe lu ngaru srak?
(Kop, txo nga san kehe sìk plltxe...Oel ngati tspeiang.)

Translation:

Nicholas,
Your mind is strong, and you're handsome
But often I don't understand what you do/your actions
I smile because you speak with me (trying to avoid the tricky "when")
Your voice is like a song
I feel funny via/following this time [when] I am with you (well, nevermind avoiding "when")
But I think that you are beloved to me
And this day is Love-Day
Therefore, I ask you...
Am I also beloved to you?
Also, if you say no, I will happily kill you.

I thew the last line in there because we've been dating for two years, so he'd darn well better love me! (In the same vein, I am not sure why I said "I think you are beloved to me." Blech. Poetic license.)

Grammar insecurities: Line five...trying to say "when" in a non-interrogative way. And the last line...it's all hypothetical, and I know there's something I have to add in grammar-wise because of that, but I don't know what.

[Nume fpi sänume]

No need for this to be stickied anymore, this post will bump it to first page.

I'm just angry and bitter because im alone.