First attempt

[Ngima Nikre]

Alright. I think I have a good hold on this, after having spent a few weeks reading and studying in my spare time. These translated song lyrics represent my first major foray into translating whole sentences and ideas into Na'vi, so bear with me as I probably made a ton of mistakes.

The song is "Smoke and Shadows" by an 80s band called Vain. I chose it mostly because it had easier words and few concepts that weren't in Na'vi. The original lyrics are in the description text. Note that my result wasn't intended to be sung.

I know it's a lot (review a line or the whole thing, whatever ), but any corrections/suggestions/explanations are most welcome.

Unil si, unil si neto
ngayä ayunil akawng nìwotx,
ki ayok 'ì'awn.
Krro tsun fo new livängu ngapxaw...

Ngari mepunmì oe hamahaw txon asyen
tsalsungay oe ke lu tsatseng.
Ngari tokxil nì'aw omum tsat tìkxey ke si
ulte ngari ayunilmì oe zaya'u fìtxon.

Tafral tivung fìtxon ngari ayunilmì oe.
Tivung oe lu 'aw.
Oe ngahu tengkrr nga hahaw txonro.
Nga plltxe a oe lu 'aw.

Ngayä ayzìsìt nìwotx
nga 'amì'awn ke nitram.
'ivefu kxenerit sì ayukit.
Set nìngay tsranten ke'u.

[repeat second & third verses]

Ngal 'efu kxenerit sì ayukit. Fì'u ke lu unil.

Alìm fìtxan, ngal stawm 'upxareti.
Ngari tokx zawng, new tsat nìwotx.
Tse'a kxenerit, slä ngaru omum fol plltxe tìkxeyti
krrpe ngal 'efu tìsrawit pxaw txep.

[repeat third verse twice]

[Payä Tìrol]

Unil si, unil si neto
ngeyä ayunil akawng nìwotx,
ki ayok 'ì'awn.
Krro tsun sa'u^ nivew livängu ngapxaw...

Ngari mepunmì oe hamahaw txonam^
tsalsungay oel ke tok^ tsatsengit.
Ngari tokxìl nì'aw^ omum futa tsaw tsun ke tìkxey sivi
ulte ngari ayunilmì oe zaya'u fìtxon.

Tafral tivung fìtxon ngari ayunilmì oeti^.
Tivung oeti lu 'aw.
Oe ngahu lu tengkrr nga hahaw txonro.
Ngal plltxe futa oe lu 'aw.

Ngeyä ayzìsìt nìwotx
nga 'amì'awn ke nitram.^
'ivefu kxenerit sì ayukit.
Set nìngay ke tsranten ke'u^.

Ngal 'efu kxenerit sì ayukit. Fì'u ke lu unil.

Alìm fìtxan, ngal stawm 'upxareti.
Ngari tokx zawng, new tsat nìwotx.
Tse'a kxenerit, slä omum futa fol oeru plltxe tìkxeyti
krr a^ ngal 'efu tìsrawit pxaw txep.

That should be more correct, I think :3
Edit: Formatting Done!

['Oma Tirea]

ngeyä ayunil akawng nìwotx,
Krro tsun sa'u nivew livängu ngapxaw...

I would say "they," referring to nightmares, is more non-person...

Ngari mepunmì oe hamahaw txon aham^

asyen would mean "the last night" as in "the final night (in a series)".

tsalsungay oel ke tok tsatsengit.

tok is used instead of lu for "to be" used to describe location: "to be at".

Ngari tokxìl nì'aw^ omum futa tsa'u tsun ke tìkxey sivi

I'm not sure about "to lie", but I can't think of anything better at the moment.

Tafral tivung fìtxon ngari ayunilmì oet(i).
Tivung oet(i) lu 'aw.
Oe ngahu lu tengkrr nga hahaw txonro.
Ngal plltxe futa oe lu 'aw.

Ngeyä ayzìsìt nìwotx


Let me save this while I format...

Tsun livu sìltsan, ngian...

What's wrong with "tsa'u" instead of "tsaw"?

[Payä Tìrol]

Oh, nothing. I didn't think of that, actually...

['Oma Tirea]

Tam.

NB, it is probably better to use "tsa'u" instead of "tsaw" because of what both "tsaw" and "taw" lenit to.

[Payä Tìrol]

Yeah, not a bad idea, I changed my edit

[Ngima Nikre]

Oe irayo seiyi nìtxan mengaru!

Most of those corrections make plenty of sense. Plus I learned some things (there's a specific word for last night? heh )

The one thing I'm still confused about is the use of futa. When and why does one use that as opposed to something else?

[Payä Tìrol]

Futa is a contraction of fì'ut a, or "this thing(ACC) which is".
It's basically used to make a clause become the transitive object of the sentence's main verb.

For example:

Fpìrmìl oel futa aynga natsew tsive'a fi'ut.

I was just thinking this-thing-which-is: {you might want to see this}.

[Ngima Nikre]

Ahh, now that makes sense.

Irayo again for your help!

[Payä Tìrol]

Oeru meuia