Help with Postcard?

[nìTsìng Lekinama Yayo]

Okay, I really want to send a postcard to Karyu Pawl, and I have the art done and everything. All I need to finish is the message. Please help correct this; I haven't done something like this in a while and I don't want to look like a total skxawng to Karyu Pawl. 



Kaltxì, ma Nawma Karyu Pawl!

Fko syaw oer Nìtsìng Lekinama Yayo. (Ngaytxoa, oe ngamop oeyä tstxofpi 'a'awa aylì'u. Oe namew pivlltxe san Gryphon sìk.) Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi, oel irayo seiyi ngaru. Hufwa ke frrfen san Learnnavi.org sìk –it oel, mi fìlì'fya lu oer yawne. Plltxe nìNa'vi oe krr a lu letsunslu.

Fwa pamrel tìsusi lu oer prrte'. Awlie, oe pamrel simvi vulur a lamu nìwotx nìNa'vi, ulte oe new kem si fìkem nìmun. Kop sunu oeru wiveym, ayNa'viti lahea ayketuwongitsì nìpxi.

Rutxe, fmival futa ngivop txantsana fìlì'fyati alor.

Ta Yayo

[Payä Tìrol]

Kaltxì, ma Nawma Karyu Pawl!

Fko syaw oer Nìtsìng Lekinama Yayo. (Ngaytxoa, oel ngamop oeyä tstxofpi 'a'awa aylì'ut(i). Oe namew pivlltxe san Gryphon sìk^.) Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi, oel irayo seiyi ngaru. Hufwa ke frrfen san Learnnavi.org sìk –it oel^, mi fìlì'fya lu oer yawne. Plltxe nìNa'vi oe krr a lu letsunslu.

Fwa^ pamrel tìsusi lu oer prrte'. 'awlie, oe pamrel simvi vulur a lamu nìwotx nìNa'vi, ulte oe new kem sivi fìkem nìmun. Kop sunu oeru wiveym^, ayNa'viti lahea ayketuwongitsì nìpxi.

Rutxe, fmival futa ngivop txantsana fìlì'fyati alor^.

Ta Yayo

Sounds good though! (I still need to think of something to write for mine :/ )

I made some minor stylistic and grammar corrections and comments... maybe someone else can help with something I'm not sure about:

Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi

Should that be "tìngusop" and does that end up taking a direct object?

[Carborundum]

Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi

Should that be "tìngusop" and does that end up taking a direct object?

I don't think it should be tìngusop, because "create" is definitely a verb here. Although ngop is only listed as v. rather than vtr., I still think it's reasonable to assume that lì'fya would indeed take the accusative.
However, I don't see what that <iv> is doing in there. I'd just go with furia ngop lì'fyati lena'vi. Possibly ngerop or even ngereiop instead of just ngop, to mark that it is an ongoing process that we appreciate very much.

On another note; tewti, ngima 'upxare nìtxan! Mine was pretty much just oel ngati kameie ma karyu

[nìTsìng Lekinama Yayo]

Kaltxì, ma Nawma Karyu Pawl!

Fko syaw oer Nìtsìng Lekinama Yayo. (Ngaytxoa, oel ngamop oeyä tstxofpi 'a'awa aylì'ut(i). Oe namew pivlltxe san Gryphon sìk^.) Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi, oel irayo seiyi ngaru. Hufwa ke frrfen san Learnnavi.org sìk –it oel^, mi fìlì'fya lu oer yawne. Plltxe nìNa'vi oe krr a lu letsunslu.

Fwa^ pamrel tìsusi lu oer prrte'. 'awlie, oe pamrel simvi vulur a lamu nìwotx nìNa'vi, ulte oe new kem sivi fìkem nìmun. Kop sunu oeru wiveym^, ayNa'viti lahea ayketuwongitsì nìpxi.

Rutxe, fmival futa ngivop txantsana fìlì'fyati alor^.

Ta Yayo

Irayo, ma tsmuktu!  Thanks for catching all my aykeyey. I'll fix them up right away.

I meant to say "I don't visit LN.org much... hehe, opps.  And yeah, that fwa was a typo... >.> At first I was going to say "I like writing stories", but then I realized "tsa-hey, how in Eywa's name am I supposed to write that?" and scrapped it. I guess I forgot to remove the fwa. Again, thanks for pointing that out!

Also, kop sunu oeru wiveym was my attempt to say "I like to draw", but I think I'll change the wiveym to tìwuseym so it'll be "I like drawing" instead. I know for sure that's right.

Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi

Should that be "tìngusop" and does that end up taking a direct object?

I don't think it should be tìngusop, because "create" is definitely a verb here. Although ngop is only listed as v. rather than vtr., I still think it's reasonable to assume that lì'fya would indeed take the ergative.
However, I don't see what that <iv> is doing in there. I'd just go with furia ngop lì'fyati lena'vi. Possibly ngerop or even ngereiop instead of just ngop, to mark that it is an ongoing process that we appreciate very much.

On another note; tewti, ngima 'upxare nìtxan! Mine was pretty much just oel ngati kameie ma karyu

As for the <iv> thing, for some reason I keep seeing people putting an extra subjunctive infix in fwa and futa constructs. (Not sure about furia, though.) I always assumed this was to distinguish the verb in the construct from the one in the rest of the sentence, but I'm not entirely sure. I probably should've gone and cleared that up before jumping to conclusions. Bad Yayo, bad. *pushes self Dobby-style*

[Payä Tìrol]

Oh, ok. Then yes, it should be tìwuseyn

[nìTsìng Lekinama Yayo]

Oh, ok. Then yes, it should be tìwuseyn

...I totally knew that. XDDDD *fail* Irayo!

Okay, here's the edited version. One more run through and I think it should be ready for the postcard.

Spoiler

Kaltxì, ma Nawma Karyu Pawl!

Fko syaw oer Nìtsìng Lekinama Yayo. (Ngaytxoa, oe ngamop oeyä tstxofpi 'a'awa aylì'ut. Oe namew pivlltxe fìlì'ut alu Gryphon.) Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi, oel irayo seiyi ngaru. Hufwa ke frrfen nìtxan tsatsengit alu learnnavi.org oel, mi fìlì'fya lu oer yawne. Plltxe nìNa'vi oe krr a tsunslu.

Pamrel tìsusi lu oer prrte'. 'awlie, oe pamrel simvi vulur a lamu nìwotx nìNa'vi, ulte oe new kem sivi fìkem nìmun. Kop sunu oeru tìwuseyn, ayNa'viti lahea ayketuwongitsì nìpxi.

Rutxe, fmival txantsana fìlì'fyati alor.

Ta Yayo

[Payä Tìrol]

Hufwa ke frrfen nìtxan tsatsengit...

May want pxìm "often" instead here.

Furia ngivop lì'fyati leNa'vi...

Probably want <er> here too.. ngerop