Sentence correct?

[Zeeisha]

 Kaltxì seiyi oe ayngaru,

I need someone to check, is this sentence in Na'vi correct? If not, can someone fix it?


English: This world is dull (without color). So, it's my duty to make it colorful.
Na'vi: Fìkifkey längu 'opinluke. Ha, oeyä tson lu fwa ngop pxayopin kifkey. (?)

I'm a beginner so I need to ask. 

[Toliman]

I would say that:

Fìkifkey längu ngul ('opinluke). Ha oeyä tson lu tìngop kifkeyä a lu pxayopin.

(This world is ngul. So my duty is creation of world which is colorful) 

[Zeeisha]

That sounds better! Irayo!

[Toliman]

Kea tìkin

[Tirea Aean]

Kaltxì seiyi oe ayngaru,

Kaltxì

I need someone to check, is this sentence in Na'vi correct? If not, can someone fix it?


English: This world is dull (without color). So, it's my duty to make it colorful.
Na'vi: Fìkifkey längu 'opinluke. Ha, oeyä tson lu fwa ngop pxayopin kifkey. (?)

Very close actually. Minimal fix:

Fìkifkey längu ngul ('opinluke). Ha, oeyä tson lu fwa ngop pxayopina kifkeyt.

I'm a beginner so I need to ask. 

Nothin wrong with that You're doin quite well imo

I would say that:

Fìkifkey längu ngul ('opinluke). Ha oeyä tson lu tìngop kifkeyä a lu pxayopin.

(This world is ngul. So my duty is creation of world which is colorful) 

this is fine too of course