Two sentences

[HTML_Earth]

Okay, so I'm going to give my huntsman a description, and I want to be sure that the grammar is correct.

Fì'ut txamula 'awvea Toruk Maktol. Fì'u tsun livu sweya taronyur nì'aw.

It's supposed to be: This (bow) was made by the first Toruk Makto. only the best hunter can have this (bow).

I'm pretty sure the first one is okay, but the second one is most likely wrong.

[Sireayä mokri]

I think it would be better:

"Fì'ut ngolop 'awvea Toruk Maktol. Fì'ut tsun sivar sweya taronyu nì'aw."

[HTML_Earth]

Fì'ut ngolop 'awvea Toruk Maktol.

Txula seems better, because you don't create it, but you build it from wood, string and other things.
But I don't know if that is what the words actually are meant to be.

Fì'ut tsun sivar sweya taronyu nì'aw.

How could I forget sar? That's what was missing!

[Sireayä mokri]

Txula seems better, because you don't create it, but you build it from wood, string and other things.
But I don't know if that is what the words actually are meant to be.

Well, I think you can create it from wood, string and other things as well. It's just my opinion. But if you think txula is better here, then everything is correct.

[HTML_Earth]

Now that I think about it, I think I'll just use ngop.

[Carborundum]

Fì'ut tsun sivar sweya taronyu nì'aw

This sentence structure is rather odd. Red and blue are separate clauses, and shouldn't be mixed up.
TSun sweya taronyu nì'aw fì'ut sivar, or pretty much any other order that keeps them apart, would be fine.

[wm.annis]

Fì'ut tsun sivar sweya taronyu nì'aw

This sentence structure is rather odd.

Well, modals are a bit odd.  I usually take the modal+verb together as a single element.  I don't see anything wrong with that wording.

[omängum fra'uti]

We also have precedent from Avatar Pot tsun oe tspivang nìftue.

Also, why fì'u rather than fìtsko?  Either works just fine so it's really just a stylistic preference, but I'd probably have gone fìtsko rather than fì'u the first time, and either fì'u or just leave it implied and unstated the second.

[Carborundum]

Fì'ut tsun sivar sweya taronyu nì'aw

This sentence structure is rather odd.

Well, modals are a bit odd.  I usually take the modal+verb together as a single element.  I don't see anything wrong with that wording.

I stand corrected.